Nowadays, articles or events in a theme of young people’s rebellions against social rules trend in hot lists frequently, which raises concerns about whether the rules that societies today expect young generations to follow and obey are too strict. Some parents assert that never have such rules rigorous enough to teach their children, others think otherwise. Personally speaking, I incline to the perspective that society need to loose the rules imposed on young people. The reasons to substantiate my viewpoints will be elaborated upon hereunder.
The first exquisite point should be mentioned is that young people’s creativity and obsession with novelty have been repressed under the pressure of rigor rules. The primary reason for these circumstances is the fear for breaking social conventions that embedded in every youth’s mind, which also deters them from taking a further step. Japan, for instance, used to be regarded as one of main leaders in world’s advanced technology industry. Their products had been occupied the most in global market. However, their domestic social rules changed drastically in recent years, from tolerate to restricted, which led to a even worse result. Not only did Japan’s engine for invention failed, but also young Japanese lost their faith. Eventually, their young generations’s principle became following the old patterns, without the courage to break the rules and explore new areas. Thus, social rules today shouldn’t be so strict that young people’ potential talents will be hidden.
Another reason drives me to indicate is that young people’s psychological health will be affected under such strict rules. To be more specific, growing in a environment abounded with rigorous rules, individuals can become insufficient with happiness or satisfaction. In the worst cases, youths may even tend to commit crimes. A research carried by Tokyo University attributes juvenile delinquency to overwhelming rigid social rules. According to their statistics, with more strict rules imposed on young people in the trial, their negative feelings, like depression, sorrow or even rage rose by 27%. Moreover, their tendency to crime increased by 13%, which was a very exaggerating result. Hence, we must be alert to the psychological dilemma for adolescents brought by strict social rules.
Nevertheless, a voice arises that strict rules should be enacted since without meticulous conductions and systematic regulations, diversified information on the internet may allure young people and lead them to the wrong way. Yet, the drawbacks of such statement outweigh it’s merits. For young people are tend to form rebellious psychology and take absurd actions to run afoul of rigid rules. Overall, the inherent for adolescents’ conflicting behaviors are the result of extreme rigorous rules.
In a nutshell, judging from what I have mentioned above, I should reinforce my perspective that currently, the rules that societies expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2566.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51827956989 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84444354116 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 212.727598566 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587096774194 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 770.4 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.4544459604 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.916666667 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.375 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.70833333333 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.85842293907 415% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258798053666 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0686001902192 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775098021157 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175402379601 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0764504489297 0.0645574589148 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.64 8.01818996416 120% => OK
difficult_words: 149.0 86.8835125448 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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