Children should do organized activities in their free time while others believe children should be free to do what they want Discuss both views and give your opinion

It is argue that children should have more activities outside in their free time. In opposition, some people said that it is neccessary for kid to have their freedom time. This essay will mention both views and shown my own opinion toward this statement.
To begin with, it is very important for children to let them join in more exercise when they are in mature age. Beside hard-working study time, children should have some activities to relax and renew themselves. To be more specific, the more exercise does children have, the more comprehensive development like brain, health and ginger they gain. Parents or teachers should give them a tabletime to control and ensure that it not only useful, helpful but also their children don't feel bored and upset. Researchers find out that 90% children who do activities is healthier, more flexible and smarter than other ones. So that, aldult should encourage their child to increase their activate instead of sitting here and watching TV all day.
On the other hand, aldult shouldn't limit their activities in free time and let they do what they want. After a tiring study day, children need private time to do their favourite activities. Furthermore, they need a space to self - developmentally without others intervention. Parents and teachers are managing in study time, so they should give their child freedom in break time. Following a survey organised by the US, more than a half children in the world choose individual space in free time. Naturally, none of kids want to restrain and attach by anybody including relatives so we shouldn't meddle and force them in any frame that they don't like. In summary, children freetime shouldn't intervent or restrain by anyone and let they do what they want in limit of regulation.
In conclusion, all family in the world is different, so the way they do with their children is depend on their family's opinion. If I have a kid, I will encourage them do some excercise to practise and self - developmentally. In addition, I still give them a freedom space to do whatever they want.

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Average: 6.7 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'argued'.
Suggestion: argued
It is argue that children should have more activiti...
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Line 2, column 475, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...useful, helpful but also their children dont feel bored and upset. Researchers find ...
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Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... TV all day. On the other hand, aldult shouldnt limit their activities in free time and...
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Line 3, column 586, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ch by anybody including relatives so we shouldnt meddle and force them in any frame that...
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Line 3, column 640, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e and force them in any frame that they dont like. In summary, children freetime sho...
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Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ont like. In summary, children freetime shouldnt intervent or restrain by anyone and let...
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Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... the way they do with their children is depend on their familys opinion. If I have a k...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, in summary, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90028490028 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6620998166 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521367521368 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.0207662485 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.5263157895 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461788362855 0.244688304435 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147832041354 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872230753133 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282005972773 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576751857191 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'argued'.
Suggestion: argued
It is argue that children should have more activiti...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 475, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...useful, helpful but also their children dont feel bored and upset. Researchers find ...
^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
... TV all day. On the other hand, aldult shouldnt limit their activities in free time and...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 586, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ch by anybody including relatives so we shouldnt meddle and force them in any frame that...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 640, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e and force them in any frame that they dont like. In summary, children freetime sho...
^^^^
Line 3, column 681, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...ont like. In summary, children freetime shouldnt intervent or restrain by anyone and let...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 96, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'depended'.
Suggestion: depended
... the way they do with their children is depend on their familys opinion. If I have a k...
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, in addition, in conclusion, in summary, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1720.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 351.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90028490028 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6620998166 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521367521368 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 533.7 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 23.0207662485 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.5263157895 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4736842105 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.84210526316 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.461788362855 0.244688304435 189% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147832041354 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0872230753133 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.282005972773 0.151304729494 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576751857191 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.