Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
It is sometimes argued that children should make their best efforts in everything they do. While I accept that children can gain several beneficial impacts when they try their best to do anything, I still believe that the demerits form this perception is much more than its benefits.
On the one hand, being encouraged to do every thing best can have positive impacts in their personal growth. Initially, it can shape children’s personalities, making them become hard working in the long term. Hard work is one of the most thing that make a person become success in both academic performance and in work place. In addition, this encouragement can make youngsters have efforts to do something they may reject. With a high goal in mind, children may work hard and gain high results, in long term it can help them do well in any field they participate in.
On the other hand, trying their best to do everything can also affects children in bad way. Firstly, children can be under pressure due to the thought that they need to success in everything. Consequently, they can do anything to achieve the first place even it is illegal. For instance, several students cheated in examinations to get the highest score. In addition, if they cannot achieve whatever they want, they may suffer from metal issues such as seld-doubt, which can make them feel physical and mental fatigue in long term. Furthermore, children should also enjoy the joyful in their childhood instead of always being competitive. For example, it is better when children can play some games with their peers, immerse themselves in the exciting ambiance rather than always finding the ways to win others.
To sum up, it is true that children can gain several merits in their growth when they try to do everything best; however I believe that negative impacts of this perception is likely outweight its beneficial ones.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ng their best to do everything can also affects children in bad way. Firstly, children ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91536050157 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59681494966 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529780564263 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8671974489 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.533333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254028074133 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103518357309 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690164040658 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179127512073 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048860093779 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'affect'
Suggestion: affect
...ng their best to do everything can also affects children in bad way. Firstly, children ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, well, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, it is true, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 24.0651302605 175% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 319.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91536050157 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59681494966 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 176.041082164 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529780564263 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.8671974489 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.533333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254028074133 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103518357309 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690164040658 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179127512073 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.048860093779 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 78.4519038076 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.