Television advertising directed toward young children should not be allowed.
Nowadays television is indeed a indispensable device for every family, which palys a important role in our daily life. we are informed of the news on TV channals evey morning before going to work. we also can see a film or a entertainment show at the weekends to relax ourselves after a busy and overwelmed week. Especially, as a Chinese people, we are accustomed to wait to watch the spring festivel ceremony show. So we can not live happily without a TV. when it comes to the effects on children, it is the device that conpany with them the most of the day, because they do not go to school. Take me for example, a lagre amount of my childhood memory is related to the television, the most magic device at home. the motion picture of the Monkey King, the Little bird , all these cartoon works consists my childhood life.
I don't consider it is safe and suitble to perform advertising to childern on Tv. First, I can image the merchant would put colourful thing and megic object in the advertisment to attract the curious eyes of lovely kids. we perhaps first tend to admit this, indeed it can encourage the chidren to think creativelly when they see those beauitful adertisement on TV. However, once such advertisements are allowed, the merchant may increasingly focus on their profit other than considering its effects on the minds of children.
Second, when watching these advertisementm, children naturally will ask their parents for money, but actually they do not be able to juge whether it's a product worth buying. For instance, Bruce, one child of my uncle, have seen a transfomer adertisment on TV, this model of transformer seems so real and powerful, Bruce couldn't help crying to ask my uncle to buy it. It's kind of expensive for it's plastic.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
Nowadays television is indeed a indispensable device for every family, ...
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Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...le device for every family, which palys a important role in our daily life. we ar...
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Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...lys a important role in our daily life. we are informed of the news on TV channals...
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Line 1, column 198, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...nals evey morning before going to work. we also can see a film or a entertainment ...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...oing to work. we also can see a film or a entertainment show at the weekends to r...
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Line 1, column 354, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[4]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'accustomed to waiting'.
Suggestion: accustomed to waiting
...Especially, as a Chinese people, we are accustomed to wait to watch the spring festivel ceremony s...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...evision, the most magic device at home. the motion picture of the Monkey King, the...
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Line 1, column 740, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...evice at home. the motion picture of the Monkey King, the Little bird , all these...
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Line 1, column 770, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ure of the Monkey King, the Little bird , all these cartoon works consists my chi...
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Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...ttract the curious eyes of lovely kids. we perhaps first tend to admit this, indee...
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Line 3, column 417, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r, once such advertisements are allowed, the merchant may increasingly focus on t...
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Line 5, column 346, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to cry' or 'cry'.
Suggestion: to cry; cry
... and powerful, Bruce couldn't help crying to ask my uncle to buy it. It's ki...
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Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'for example', 'for instance', 'kind of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.225895316804 0.229887763892 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.154269972452 0.158761421928 97% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0716253443526 0.0866891130778 83% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0523415977961 0.046263068375 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0771349862259 0.0685040099705 113% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0964187327824 0.118717715034 81% => OK
Participles: 0.0247933884298 0.0351676179071 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.81535819705 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0413223140496 0.0309702414327 133% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0964187327824 0.0887237588012 109% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0192837465565 0.0209618222197 92% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0110192837466 0.0139019557991 79% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1791.0 2387.08602151 75% => OK
No of words: 308.0 408.028673835 75% => More words wanted.
Chars per words: 5.81493506494 5.86048508987 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18926351222 4.48200974243 93% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321428571429 0.338922669872 95% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.256493506494 0.251872472559 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175324675325 0.174417080927 101% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116883116883 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81535819705 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655844155844 0.524397521467 125% => OK
Word variations: 80.6678954955 59.2087087015 136% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5333333333 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4216925641 48.84282405 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.4 120.699889404 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5333333333 20.5533526081 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.644075263715 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.5376344086 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.54480286738 216% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 46.1826839827 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.22330097087 1.45489161554 84% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0611695404891 0.300154397459 20% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0936755719935 0.103427244359 91% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0679231087537 0.0752933317313 90% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.4906239799 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.137602914679 0.151897553556 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0261819492356 0.114077575197 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314527867647 0.0781384742642 40% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.339455044658 0.336927656856 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.128799231897 0.067059652881 192% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0444068309143 0.210909579961 21% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00259489560222 0.0618886996521 4% => Paragraphs are similar to each other.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
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Rates: 70.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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