Why people attend to college or university?
People attend to college or university for different reasons. I will talk about my reason in attending university and few other reasons that I think encourage people to attend college and university.
First of all in the country that I was risen, the certificate from your college was your identity and it help you to select your career and your future. Meanwhile, my parents which are both educated improve my self esteem and diligence to work hard in this regard. National exam which is frightening for most of young people at my time it was piece of the cake for me because I was well prepared for it. Consequently I enter the first university in country, best major, Medicine Tehran University. Honsotly most of my family members graduated from Tehran University and it was such a shame for me if I did not accept there. My mother who is my role model and I always admire her is also the professor of Tehran University. She told me, once I was frightened from the exam, do not be frightened because the exact time which you need to be scared, is when you are in front of a patient and he/she asks you a question and you should be worried at that time. So I was not scared of the enterance exam for university and I of course was well prepared by the family.
Furthermore right now I am in the world that is huge and full of cimstances which being hard working can not help. Now I have to anticipate patients questions and make myself prepared to answer all of them. Moreover, I am a physician fully certified to work in Canada and United States and it is much more important than those things that was popular in my country and my peers at that time when I was 18. In addition, I thinks that everyday everything is chaging and people are changing too. My opinion regarding my future is changed.
In summary, although I had influence from my parents and I had lots of resoureces, I beleive that people should have influence from their parents , but not only because they like it kinds do not need to change their career or pathway and goal and admit to college and university.
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Essay evaluation report
and it help you to select your career
and it helps you to select your career
my parents which are both educated
my parents who are both educated
Sentence: Meanwhile, my parents which are both educated improve my self esteem and diligence to work hard in this regard.
Description: A verb, past participle is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to educated and improve
Sentence: So I was not scared of the enterance exam for university and I of course was well prepared by the family.
Error: enterance Suggestion: entrance
Sentence: Furthermore right now I am in the world that is huge and full of cimstances which being hard working can not help.
Error: cimstances Suggestion: distances
Sentence: In addition, I thinks that everyday everything is chaging and people are changing too.
Error: chaging Suggestion: changing
Sentence: In summary, although I had influence from my parents and I had lots of resoureces, I beleive that people should have influence from their parents , but not only because they like it kinds do not need to change their career or pathway and goal and admit to college and university.
Error: resoureces Suggestion: resources
Error: beleive Suggestion: believe
flaws:
The third paragraph is off the topic. Need to give three reasons Why people attend to college or university, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1 ...(e.g. will get a good job)
para 3: reason 2 ...(e.g. will get more knowledge)
para 4: reason 3 ...(e.g. will make new friends)
para 5: because of reason 1, reason 2, and reason 3,...so conclusion.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 18 in 30
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 381 350
No. of Characters: 1667 1500
No. of Different Words: 185 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.418 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.375 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.464 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.812 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.197 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.376 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 106, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
...m your college was your identity and it help you to select your career and your futu...
^^^^
Line 3, column 252, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
... me because I was well prepared for it. Consequently I enter the first university in countr...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...onsequently I enter the first university in country, best major, Medicine Tehran...
^^
Line 3, column 306, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... enter the first university in country, best major, Medicine Tehran University ...
^^
Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... me if I did not accept there. My mother who is my role model and I always admire...
^^
Line 4, column 297, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ened from the exam, do not be frightened because the exact time which you need to...
^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ourse was well prepared by the family. Furthermore right now I am in the world that is hug...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 16, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...hat time when I was 18. In addition, I thinks that everyday everything is chaging and...
^^^^^^
Line 8, column 146, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...should have influence from their parents , but not only because they like it kinds...
^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'furthermore', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in summary', 'of course', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.213759213759 0.229887763892 93% => OK
Verbs: 0.184275184275 0.158761421928 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0540540540541 0.0866891130778 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0614250614251 0.046263068375 133% => OK
Pronouns: 0.135135135135 0.0685040099705 197% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.115479115479 0.118717715034 97% => OK
Participles: 0.044226044226 0.0351676179071 126% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.52559182976 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.02457002457 0.0309702414327 79% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0540540540541 0.0887237588012 61% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00982800982801 0.0209618222197 47% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.022113022113 0.0139019557991 159% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 2387.08602151 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 408.028673835 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48293963255 5.86048508987 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.307086614173 0.338922669872 91% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.209973753281 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.139107611549 0.174417080927 80% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0944881889764 0.112833075102 84% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52559182976 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498687664042 0.524397521467 95% => OK
Word variations: 53.6755885003 59.2087087015 91% => OK
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6684587814 73% => OK
Sentence length: 25.4 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.2910066974 48.84282405 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.266666667 120.699889404 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4 20.5533526081 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.06666666667 0.644075263715 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.5376344086 176% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.54480286738 162% => OK
Readability: 46.3973753281 45.7405998639 101% => OK
Elegance: 0.98064516129 1.45489161554 67% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194316672534 0.300154397459 65% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.122247824415 0.103427244359 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0943398263577 0.0752933317313 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.675543016096 0.497263757937 136% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.196160176825 0.151897553556 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108359766165 0.114077575197 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.15559960424 0.0781384742642 199% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.215355623761 0.336927656856 64% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0920988712591 0.067059652881 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127918191407 0.210909579961 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150266647506 0.0618886996521 243% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8870967742 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 8.42114695341 83% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 13.0 13.6433691756 95% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.