"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
At present the percentage of youth around the world is about 60% of the total population with different age groups. This shows that the command of every leading authority should be given in the hands of these youth so that the nation will lead with a innovative, ebullient, intelligent approach. The given issue claims that our society should instill these youth with a sense of coorperation , not competition. It seems a very logical and a noble claim but as its a fact that every coin has two sides; one good and one bad. So, we should examine both the sides of this claim before reaching to any conclusion.
Firstly, the good side of the claim is that its important to maintain harmony among evry person in the society we should be cooperative. One twig is weaker than a log of branches. As a human we have a tendency of having a competitive attitude with our fellow mates and its just normal because starting from the school days we are doing the same, be it studying hard to top the class or, to score higher than the friend. Standing alone no one can lead a government or an industry, He must have the bunch of people to support him, they msut believe him and this can be done only when all of them are cooperative, friendly.
As said that, it also has an another side too , one cannot succeed if he is not competitive. For example, in a company a fellow mate is doing good work to impress the boss then the other office mate will also try to work hard to impress the boss so that they can be promoted. Every one wants to succeed in their lives, no one wants to be at a same place thoughout their life. Therefore, to win the race one has to run, to be at a first position, one has to beat the other racers. No one is similar, everyone has some unique qualities, thus, to stand out from the crowd one has to prove his mantle.
Consequently, both the sides of this claim has its pros and cons, none can be ignored. thus, one should have both the qualities to succeed. A leader should be competitive yet cooperativebecause one cannot impose the decision on anybody. To lead a nation or any industry, one should respect his followers as they are the one who made him , they believe him. Therefore, he should be trustworthy.
Summing up the whole discussion, one can easily conclude that both sides of this coin is essential for anyone to succeed in their lives. By ignoring any of the side will not work algood for anyone. One must optimize the benefit of each side and thus, build a path of success through tem. Hence, the claim is not coherent and contain some fallacies thus, demands a re-evaluation . TheIt has ignored some positive things abouth the counterpart of the claim.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 204, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this youth' or 'these youths'?
Suggestion: this youth; these youths
...thority should be given in the hands of these youth so that the nation will lead with a inn...
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Line 1, column 250, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...youth so that the nation will lead with a innovative, ebullient, intelligent appr...
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Line 1, column 352, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this youth' or 'these youths'?
Suggestion: this youth; these youths
... claims that our society should instill these youth with a sense of coorperation , not comp...
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Line 1, column 392, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...these youth with a sense of coorperation , not competition. It seems a very logica...
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Line 1, column 461, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...a very logical and a noble claim but as its a fact that every coin has two sides; o...
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Line 5, column 27, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a side' or 'another side'.
Suggestion: a side; another side
...friendly. As said that, it also has an another side too , one cannot succeed if he is not c...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...id that, it also has an another side too , one cannot succeed if he is not competi...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eat the other racers. No one is similar, everyone has some unique qualities, thus...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Thus
...its pros and cons, none can be ignored. thus, one should have both the qualities to ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...llowers as they are the one who made him , they believe him. Therefore, he should ...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... fallacies thus, demands a re-evaluation . TheIt has ignored some positive things ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'firstly', 'hence', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'then', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as to', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.191605839416 0.240241500013 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.164233576642 0.157235817809 104% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0656934306569 0.0880659088768 75% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0510948905109 0.0497285424764 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0547445255474 0.0444667217837 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.107664233577 0.12292977631 88% => OK
Participles: 0.029197080292 0.0406280797675 72% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.51013206867 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0346715328467 0.030933414821 112% => OK
Particles: 0.0036496350365 0.0016655270985 219% => OK
Determiners: 0.138686131387 0.0997080785238 139% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.036496350365 0.0249443105267 146% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0036496350365 0.0148568991511 25% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2693.0 2732.02544248 99% => OK
No of words: 494.0 452.878318584 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45141700405 6.0361032391 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.58838876751 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.261133603239 0.366273622748 71% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.184210526316 0.280924506359 66% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.117408906883 0.200843997647 58% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0769230769231 0.132149295362 58% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51013206867 2.79330140395 90% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495951417004 0.48968727796 101% => OK
Word variations: 57.9050196668 55.4138127331 104% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.5833333333 23.380412469 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3170770076 59.4972553346 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.208333333 141.124799967 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 23.380412469 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.583333333333 0.674092028746 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.21349557522 211% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 39.0043859649 51.4728631049 76% => OK
Elegance: 1.21621621622 1.64882698954 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251949020897 0.391690518653 64% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.118825177118 0.123202303941 96% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.074389344779 0.077325440228 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.516582236897 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123838007143 0.149214159877 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908320395147 0.161403998019 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497490886902 0.0892212321368 56% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.36004758323 0.385218514788 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0558059257307 0.0692045440612 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166141724822 0.275328986314 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455639667356 0.0653680567796 70% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.4325221239 163% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88274336283 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 7.22455752212 166% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.5995575221 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.