Nowadays young people have to make the decision about their future career. Some people, however, believe that teachers and parents can make a better choice for their future career. Discuss both options and include your opinion with relevant examples from your own experience.
In this modern world, the ultimate target of every individual is to become successful in his future career. Presently, most of youngsters have tendency to make decisions about their careers by themselves. However, some people claim that parents and teachers can make productive decisions about their careers to ensure their bright future. Here, i would like to account for both sides with my own perception.
There are numerous points to endorse the former view. First and foremost, modern generation is advanced, technically skilful and well educated and therefore they are capable to make quality decisions without any help from elders. Besides this, everyone wants freedom to choose his professional career according to his interest, ability and requirement. Hence, young people do not want to take burden of their parent's expectations regarding their career. Consequently, most of youngsters believe in making self-decisions about their careers. On the contrary, others have conflicting views.
They think that quality decisions about future career can only be made by guardians and teachers. To illustrate, parents and teachers are veteran of life stages and therefore they have ability to have a deep insight in order to differentiate right and wrong. By contrast, young people who are inexperienced and immature may take wrong decisions. Thus, parents and teachers should be assigned to make career decisions for their young children. What is more, guardians and teachers understand the strength and weakness of their young children. Therefore, career chosen by them could be a 'perfect fit' for youngsters.
From my notion, both sides have their own significance. Undeniably, young people are confident for their ability to make right decisions for their career. However, we can never underestimate the advice of elders. It is advisable for young people to discuss about their career choice with their elders in order to get the benefit of their experience and knowledge.
To recapitulate, making superior decisions about career has become a herculean task in this competitive world. Therefore, youngsters, teachers and parents must share their views to find out the best outcomes for their decisions.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: First and foremost, modern generation is advanced, technically skilful and well educated and therefore they are capable to make quality decisions without any help from elders.
Error: skilful Suggestion: skillful
flaws:
Look at the subjects of sentences, most of them are: 'parents and teachers', 'people', or 'young people' or 'youngsters', or pronouns like: 'they', 'we', 'I'...
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1819 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.319 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.679 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.545 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.374 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.591 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.498 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
What could be alternative
What could be alternative subjects sir?
What should i do more to enhance score in this essay ?
How are my ideas and explaination ?
One approach is to use object
One approach is to use object as subject. for example:
In this modern world, the ultimate target of every individual is to become successful in his future career. //good
Presently, most of youngsters have tendency to make decisions about their careers by themselves. //not good
revised:
making decisions about their careers by themselves is the current tendency by most of youngsters.
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To get higher marks, don't repeat subject. More varieties of subject wanted.
also need more relative clauses and adverb clauses.
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ideas and explanations are great.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 120, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the youngsters') or simply say ''most youngsters''.
Suggestion: most of the youngsters; most youngsters
...essful in his future career. Presently, most of youngsters have tendency to make decisions about t...
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Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: I_LOWERCASE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...rs to ensure their bright future. Here, i would like to account for both sides wi...
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Line 3, column 469, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the youngsters') or simply say ''most youngsters''.
Suggestion: most of the youngsters; most youngsters
...s regarding their career. Consequently, most of youngsters believe in making self-decisions about ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, consequently, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, thus, well, on the contrary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.49122807018 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80269525899 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529239766082 0.561755894193 94% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.655522799 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.3636363636 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5454545455 20.7667163134 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.538365639155 0.244688304435 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15824878533 0.084324248473 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112840754331 0.0667982634062 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.331975869812 0.151304729494 219% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890722886051 0.056905535591 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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