young people are not help in their community. do you agree or disagree.
Youngsters are the main role for our future. Some people think that adolescences are not playing a vital role in our community. People think that nowadays young people are busy with technology and modern life. Although I understand their point of view, I have a different opinion. I believe that young people are helping in their community. The basis of my opinion is educational, social and financial.
From educational perspective, today youngsters are more educated than before. Most of the young people today are graduated from college. Educated young people are able to help and serve in their community. For instance, in our church we have many of educated youngsters. They are able to learn children. They can serve in Sunday school program. Young people are more knowledgeable. They have access to the internet, which benefit them to gain more information. Therefore they can help and serve their community in a proper way.
Socially, young people today are more social active than before. Due to the advance in the technology, young people are able to serve their community. Improvement in the technology aid young people to get more information, in addition social net work like facebook and instergame help young people to communicate. Communications among young people help them to create groups that aid in serving the community. For instance, there are many groups today that help in protecting the environment, or taking care of the neighborhood, or even helping as baby sisters. All those groups are created by young people. They want to help their community to be better.
In conclusion for the reason i mentioned above. I agree that young adult servings their community. Young adult are well educated, which help them to help their community and the other people living in the community. Young adult are socially active. they can serve the community by many different way through out their advanced technological social life.
- learning from reading is more educational than learning from watching television programs 60
- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. 73
- TPO INTEDRTED 49 73
- prepare food is easier 60
- A company has announced that it wishes to build a large factory near your community. 67
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1648.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 317.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19873817035 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74362001118 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451104100946 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1397411776 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.037037037 100.406767564 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.7407407407 20.6045352989 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.40740740741 5.45110844103 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.413562015644 0.236089414692 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.14243734921 0.076458572812 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143343860089 0.0737576698707 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.294794151626 0.150856017488 195% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582274205996 0.0645574589148 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.7 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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