Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed
Throughout history, in all civilized societies, advertising approaches has engendered copious controversies among people. Nowadays many are adamant that a myriad of elements should be taken into consideration to examine destructive and constructive aspects of advertising. Due to its importance, authorities have tried to reduce the effectiveness of inappropriate programs on people especially children. One of the issues regarding advertising is whether children should be allowed to watch advertising on TV or not. I firmly oppose the idea that in spite of undeniable merits it has many deleterious effects on young children as well. The following paragraphs will substantiate the most outstanding reasons.
First of all, one should take into this significant fact that several companies intend to impose their products to people. Especially young children are impressed by them dramatically. Companies only consider their profits and try different approaches to defraud their consumers. To illustrate this fact, one needs only to refer to many statements in advertisements which are definitely lie. To demonstrate, most of the scientists all over the world contend that advertisements make unsuitable effects on children’s mind. So they established an experimental program worldwide to estimate the impact of advertising on children’s mind. The results are surprising: over 90 percent of children who watch commercial advertising on the TV have lower learning efficiency.
In approaching this issue, apart from the fact mentioned above, one should regard another subtle point meticulously that the majority of advertisements are not age appropriate. There are many companies which offer some sexual products. As a matter of fact, they are not suitable for young children to deal with these issues at all. The modern world offer abundant examples of advertising which are totally disturbing for young children. The noteworthy refreshingly intelligible statistics, revealed by a recent social research in our country, show that the majority of companies do not care about age range of viewers and offer their products as they only could make benefit.
Being aware is vital to everyone to survive today’s tough life. Taking all aforementioned arguments into account leads us to the conclusion that we should contemplate about what children are watching. Many of advertisements not only impose their idea to viewers but also are age inappropriate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, so, well, apart from, as a matter of fact, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2097.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 370.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.66756756757 4.8611393121 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38581623665 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27505680533 2.67179642975 123% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575675675676 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 40.0162098674 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8571428571 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.619047619 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.80952380952 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.230937340028 0.236089414692 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672415627256 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0461719240017 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142363542765 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0300030584369 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.3 58.1214874552 64% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.31 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.43 8.01818996416 118% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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