TPO23 – Independent: A/D? In today's world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.
Today's world has been associated with the tremendous and fast-paste developments which bring up a critical and controversial question mark about how we should get along to all these changes; should we jump into this rapid river promptly and not being obsessed about getting drown?. Some people have found this way to adjust their selves to all upcoming unpredictable circumstances and just try to survive from their mistakes. Admittedly, I don't acknowledge taking risky mistakes as a genuine and concrete solution to be harmonized in this chaotic world and we need to make sure that everything is correct. Through ensuing paragraphs, the rationale behind this opinion will be elaborate.
First and for the most, the inattentive decisions would cost up for profound fiascos which might exterminate our whole life and annihilate all we have done later. As the matter of fact, the heedless gambling with the life has vigorous detrimental outcomes. For the illustration, there are many online frauds and schemes for the negligent individuals who don't perceive the trickery behind the deceptive advertisements which manipulate you to purchase their products. If you just allow them to coax you by their worlds, it is not far-fetched you will be trapped into those fraudsters' maneuver to emptying your pockets. We require a mindful observation through whatever we are about to participate in, either a simple purchase or start a business and so forth.
Moreover, no one can cast a shadow toward the fact that the nowadays rivals are very acknowledged and adroit in various fields and by our irrational movements they will be altered quickly; frankly, your efforts will be invaded hip and tight! For instance, I decided to work as a dental office manager just one month after moving to united states. It was a prompt and risky decision with no evaluation about the real vicissitudes and its rudimentary necessities about health care system in this country. However, I got the job in a way too sophisticated orthodontic dental office after a couple of attempts but gradually the resentments had been arisen by the clients and they compel me to dedicate my resignation letter before getting fired! And the week later, I found they hired an experienced Indian manager. The fact is this new era doesn't have that much the reliance on the good fortune!
In brief, all of the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that the absent-minded and abrupt decision-making approach is a pernicious and incongruous adjustment in the rapid-past developmental society and you will confront massive amount of failures in the long term since there are interminable line of the informed competitors who can get your place in various positions and the fraudulent who have ambushed to plunder all your efforts. I recommend to take our time properly and be assured about every single steps before the action.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: don't
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Suggestion: doesn't
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Suggestion: all the
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommend taking'.
Suggestion: recommend taking
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, frankly, however, if, moreover, so, for instance, in brief
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2425.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13771186441 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91367637508 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.603813559322 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 119.53088577 48.9658058833 244% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 173.214285714 100.406767564 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.7142857143 20.6045352989 164% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.061488432202 0.236089414692 26% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0207014248072 0.076458572812 27% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510362550305 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0361599017066 0.150856017488 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.037398953403 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.6 11.7677419355 167% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.96 8.01818996416 124% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 86.8835125448 161% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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