independent essay TPO18
Not surprisingly, some factors such as teachers have tangible impact on the students. However, I believe that the friends have stronger influence on the students.
The first noteworthy point that jots to my mind is the fact that the same characteristic behavior between the student with his friend rather than the teacher. It is clear that the student has the same level of thinking in a specific age. There are some subjects that may be rediculous for the teacher with have significant importance for the student like playing, entertainment and etc. For example, when I was a student, I have a humor friend that disrupted the class order. Although, the teacher opinion was important fore me, my friend was a paradign for me, and finally I decided to accompany with him to the class-disruption process. Therefore, although the teacher tried very much to bring his influence to bear on me, my friend has dominant influence.
Another reason which is worth mentioning is the student spend more time with his friends even outside the campus, during the break time. Furthermore, the comuncation between the student and the teacher in the most of the time is related to the course and there is not sufficent time that the teacher to have an effect on the character, development, or behavior of the student. To illustatre this, lets me present an example. when I was a student that was an excellent student at the university and always the teacher encouraged him to be mre succesfull in the future. However, it was not believable for us and every teacher he leave the university for his unconvinence girlfriend that persuade him to do this. In this condition, I found the considerable role of a friend in the student future.
All in all, taking all the reasons which I provided in the previous paragraph bring us to the conclusion that friends have enormus influence on a student compared the teacher. Since the more time have in common and the same characteritic behavior in a same age.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...the student like playing, entertainment and etc. For example, when I was a student, I ha...
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...e is not sufficent time that the teacher to have an effect on the character, deve...
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... believable for us and every teacher he leave the university for his unconvinence gir...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1653.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87610619469 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83298588666 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.477876106195 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6677547589 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3125 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.125 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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