The following appeared in a health magazine published in Corpora.
"Medical experts say that only one-quarter of Corpora's citizens meet the current standards for adequate physical fitness, even though twenty years ago, one-half of all of Corpora's citizens met the standards as then defined. But these experts are mistaken when they suggest that spending too much time using computers has caused a decline in fitness. Since overall fitness levels are highest in regions of Corpora where levels of computer ownership are also highest, it is clear that using computers has not made citizens less physically fit. Instead, as shown by this year's unusually low expenditures on fitness-related products and services, the recent decline in the economy is most likely the cause, and fitness levels will improve when the economy does."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The positive correlation between the economy and fitness levels might be appropriate but the argument is rife with numerous holes and assumptions, thus not strong enough to lead to support the author’s argument.
Citing surveys of Corpora’s citizens, the statistics seem to be misleading. Since the fractions does not aptly reveal the actual population numbers, therefore there is a possibility of having one-fourth of the current population greater in number than one-half of the population. This would otherwise weaken the argument. As a remedial measure, the author should have adopted the population to be revealed in numbers rather than fractions.
The standards on which the medical experts concluded does not collude in the fact that these might have been altered through the years. The standards might have been more stringent now than were twenty years back and therefore fulfilling the requisites might be far-fetched. For example, it might be possible that the current standards of physical fitness requires an individual to be able to run for ten kilometers while this may be mere one kilometer few years back. Unless the survey states that there had been absolutely no modifications in the standards or the extent of such modifications, it cannot be used to effectively back the author’s argument.
The argument assumes that computer ownership guarantees the utility of the computer system. This might not be true. The argument would have been strengthened if instead of analyzing the statistics corresponding to possessing computer systems, the author would have used the operability of such systems as a parameter.
The fitness related problems have been paralleled with degradation in economy which in turn mirrors the citizen’s inability to purchase fitness-related products and services. These products and services seem to be the only way to remain fit but this is not true. There are many other ways to remain fit like jogging or doing yoga, which author repudiates.
Though the economy-strengthening would allow the citizen to buy such products and services and might also result in good fitness, but the whole argument is not cogent enough to establish a direct association between the economy and fitness.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 10 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1847 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.247 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.885 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.823 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.438 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.54 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.061 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 234, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: greater
...ng one-fourth of the current population greater in number than one-half of the population. This w...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, then, therefore, thus, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 352.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4375 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06209412895 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 589.5 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0571034312 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.625 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0625 5.70786347227 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178557733426 0.218282227539 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0553757890735 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943221584649 0.0701772020484 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113080653782 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120985325579 0.0628817314937 192% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.