According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended super screen produced movies than any other year.And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific super screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
In the given argument, the author discuss problem regarding public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are also available which are made by super screen production.The author conclude that super screen production produce good quality movies on the bld allocate a greater share of its budget for public advertising. However the author's evidence supports to his theory,but several questions can be raised about the author's recommendations.
The most serious flaw in the given argument is that, the author mention about marketing department reported increses in attendance for super screen production movies than in any other year.We have not enough information that how many people attended last year and by hoe many number it is increased.The reason of attending movies many be of increasing of population or may be because of super screen production produced less number of movies than previous year and public has not many option so they attended these super screen production movies.Furthermore we need specific data to conclude the recommendation.
Moreover these specific super screen production movies got positive reviews from public as compared to previous years.The author assume that these positive reviews are not reaching enough to viewers and because of that they need to increase budget for advertising.But on the other hand these reviews ares.
Finally, the author need to provide some specific examples and proper information about what type of public platform they are using to check their movie reviews and further to increase their film publicity how much budget they will require.To take any further decision for the recommendation author has to answer these questions.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 272 350
No. of Characters: 1420 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.061 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.221 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 27 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 45.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.655 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.515 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.811 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.177 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: The
...ich are made by super screen production.The author conclude that super screen produ...
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Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'concludes'.
Suggestion: concludes
...e by super screen production.The author conclude that super screen production produce go...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e of its budget for public advertising. However the authors evidence supports to his th...
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Suggestion: , but
... authors evidence supports to his theory,but several questions can be raised about t...
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Suggestion: We
...roduction movies than in any other year.We have not enough information that how ma...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'many numbers'.
Suggestion: many numbers
...ny people attended last year and by hoe many number it is increased.The reason of attending...
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... and by hoe many number it is increased.The reason of attending movies many be of i...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...ed these super screen production movies.Furthermore we need specific data to conclude the r...
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Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ed these super screen production movies.Furthermore we need specific data to conclude the r...
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Suggestion: Moreover,
...data to conclude the recommendation. Moreover these specific super screen production ...
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Suggestion: The
...om public as compared to previous years.The author assume that these positive revie...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'assumes'.
Suggestion: assumes
...s compared to previous years.The author assume that these positive reviews are not rea...
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...need to increase budget for advertising.But on the other hand these reviews ares. ...
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Suggestion: To
...icity how much budget they will require.To take any further decision for the recom...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 2260.96107784 64% => OK
No of words: 264.0 441.139720559 60% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47348484848 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.56307096286 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86080658244 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 705.55239521 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 19.7664670659 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.8473053892 228% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.53957966 57.8364921388 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 289.0 119.503703932 242% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.8 23.324526521 226% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.0 5.70786347227 350% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350902271733 0.218282227539 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17646704287 0.0743258471296 237% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117151287321 0.0701772020484 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2100252144 0.128457276422 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993111493642 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.7 14.3799401198 213% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 10.24 48.3550499002 21% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 24.8 12.197005988 203% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.33 12.5979740519 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.32208582834 121% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 98.500998004 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 11.1389221557 205% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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