According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended super screen produced movies than any other year.And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific super screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
In the given argument, the author discuss problem regarding public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are also available which are made by super screen production.The author conclude that super screen production produce good quality movies on the basis of increase in attendace for movies and got much positive reviews.Then author has given a recommendation that the super screen production should allocate a greater share of its budget for public advertising. However the author's evidence supports to his theory,but several questions can be raised about the author's recommendations.
Moreover these specific super screen production movies got positive reviews from public as compared to previous years.The author assume that these positive reviews are not reaching enough to viewers and because of that they need to increase budget for advertising.But on the other hand these reviews are mixed like positive or negative then public will not pay more attention toward it.And it is matter what kind of public platform they are using to promote their movies and if these positive reviews are form the authentic source like radio, television and internet but here author has not given any related data .Thus,super screen production house should have to check whether they are receiving authentic reviews.
Finally, the author need to provide some specific examples and proper information about what type of public platform they are using to check their movie reviews and further to increase their film publicity how much budget they will require.To take any further decision for the recommendation author has to answer these questions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, then, thus, as to, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 58.6224719101 70% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 2235.4752809 86% => OK
No of words: 353.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42209631728 5.05705443957 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7961071828 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487252124646 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 20.2370786517 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 70.0 23.0359550562 304% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 209.4688521 60.3974514979 347% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 382.8 118.986275619 322% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 70.6 23.4991977007 300% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 24.2 5.21951772744 464% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 7.80617977528 243% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.13820224719 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345620965372 0.243740707755 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.180814909759 0.0831039109588 218% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.117100942341 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.215849963798 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0950248565307 0.0667264976115 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.4 14.1392134831 279% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -8.03 48.8420337079 -16% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 12.1743820225 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.34 12.1639044944 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.69 8.38706741573 127% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 100.480337079 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 11.8971910112 155% => OK
gunning_fog: 30.0 11.2143820225 268% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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