Analytical Writing Assessment Question
The following memo appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. This shows that eating a substantial amount of fish can clearly prevent colds. Furthermore, since colds are the reason most frequently given for absences from school and work, attendance levels will improve. Therefore, we recommend the daily use of a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
in the editorial of a local newsletter, it is stated that daily consumption of fish oil will make them healthy, and thus people would not have colds and could thus alleviate absenteeism.
however, a recommendation can be properly evaluated we need to answer two questions.
First of all, is this situation comparable to people who go to the doctor once or twice a year?
In other words, can the situation of an event be used to compare and make predictions about the other ? is it possible that the reason why people who take leave and are part of absenteeism and those who go to the doctor once or twice a year are two different reasons?
perhaps people who take leave are completely healthy and do that to get a day off for their personal use and have no connection with health issues. if this is statement is true then the argument fails to hold merit.
Secondly, does eating a lot of fish help you to be perfectly healthy?the argument assumes that eating supplements derived from fish oil is good way to prevent everyone from being absent. However, supplements that are derived have chemicals in them and not as healthy as fish itself and assuming everyone has no trouble having and gathering these supplements. It could be that the supplements are not available in the market near them, if any of this is true the above arguments does not hold water.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to reliance on these unwarranted assumptions, if the author is able to answer these questions asked above and offer more evidence and research then it is possible to evaluate the viability of this research and fully evaluate the research.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1348 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.616 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.605 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 85 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41.714 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 22.581 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 1 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.778 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.212 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
in the editorial of a local newsletter, it...
^^
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...and could thus alleviate absenteeism. however, a recommendation can be properly evalu...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uated we need to answer two questions. First of all, is this situation comparab...
^^^
Line 5, column 104, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
... and make predictions about the other ? is it possible that the reason why people ...
^^
Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Perhaps
...wice a year are two different reasons? perhaps people who take leave are completely he...
^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 148, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... have no connection with health issues. if this is statement is true then the arg...
^^
Line 6, column 148, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... have no connection with health issues. if this is statement is true then the arg...
^^
Line 6, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lth issues. if this is statement is true then the argument fails to hold merit. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 2260.96107784 61% => OK
No of words: 291.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76975945017 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13022058845 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71238930332 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 204.123752495 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.536082474227 0.468620217663 114% => OK
syllable_count: 436.5 705.55239521 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.1345434959 57.8364921388 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.181818182 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4545454545 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 5.70786347227 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0202820168814 0.218282227539 9% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0074702136466 0.0743258471296 10% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0101211611929 0.0701772020484 14% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0093237585204 0.128457276422 7% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0117939490282 0.0628817314937 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 98.500998004 57% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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