The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the healthiest citizens regularly eat.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author claims the citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles by conforming to government nutritional recommendations, increasing the amount of kiran products that are purchased and reducing sales of sulia. While it may seem like these citizens are living healthy lifestyles based on the author's assumptions, there are clear and faulty assumptions such as an unclear and possible biased survey and skewed quantifiable data.
Firstly, the author claims the citizens of Forsythe adopted a healthy lifestyle based off a survey that was conducted. This survey could have been answered by health and fitness enthusiasts or people who are trying to lose weight. The results of this survey would therefore be largely skewed in favor of a more health conscious population. This would not be vindictive of the Forythse population in general. The author can fix their argument by conducting a survey in the town hall. This would distribute the answers to the survey across the towns population. Therefore showing Forsythe as a health conscious population.
Secondly, including a fourfold increase in kiran products does not necessarily show a population that is health conscious. If the sale of kiran products in Forsyth was originally only 5 items, a fourfold increase would only be a 20 item increase. 20 items that include kiran is not enough to constitute Forsythe as a health conscious town. Also, reducing the amount of cholesterol while it is healthy is not necessarily considered as living a healthy lifestyle. Even if the amount of kerian intake was greatly increased in Forsythe this does not mean it will lead to a healthy lifestyle. One can lower their cholesterol but at the same time increase their blood pressure. Kerian can have this byproduct and therefore be risky for the citizens of Forsythe to consume. The author will have to include a full breakdown of what kerian does to the body as a whole to determine whether or not consuming more kerian will lead to a healthy lifestyle.
Finally, including a reduction of the amount of sulia intake in Forsythe which few healthy citizens eat does not support the author's argument. For one, this reduction can be vastly minimal. It could be that sales were reduced by two percent which is not enough to distribute a healthy population in Forsythe. The author does not include what is detrimental about sulia that would constitute it as bad for your health. Sulia can be a healthy product with a really sour and awful taste which would result in fewer people buying products that contain sulia. If it were a healthy product and people were not buying it because of an awful taste, the authors argument as a whole will crumble. To effectively support this argument, the author would have to include a full description of sulia, and whether it is healthy to the human body or detrimental. A weak link between a reduction of sales and healthy citizens is not enough.
In conclusion, the authors claim that the citizens of Forsythe are now living healthy lives is weak based on the assumptions that they are now adopting government nutritional lifestyles based on a faulty survey, a weak description of kiran and the increase of it experienced and a decrease in a product that was not described.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 545 350
No. of Characters: 2677 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.832 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.912 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.717 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 207 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 154 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 107 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.962 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.634 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.308 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.485 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... survey and skewed quantifiable data. Firstly, the author claims the citizens ...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'towns'' or 'town's'?
Suggestion: towns'; town's
...te the answers to the survey across the towns population. Therefore showing Forsythe ...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...the survey across the towns population. Therefore showing Forsythe as a health conscious ...
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Suggestion:
...he as a health conscious population. Secondly, including a fourfold increase ...
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Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nsidered as living a healthy lifestyle. Even if the amount of kerian intake was greatly...
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Line 9, column 873, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...oes to the body as a whole to determine whether or not consuming more kerian will lead to a he...
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...althy citizens eat does not support the authors argument. For one, this reduction can b...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...uying it because of an awful taste, the authors argument as a whole will crumble. To ef...
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..., the authors claim that the citizens of Forsythe are now living healthy lives is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, while, in conclusion, in general, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2735.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 545.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01834862385 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79014582554 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.383486238532 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 859.5 705.55239521 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6141732158 57.8364921388 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.192307692 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9615384615 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11538461538 5.70786347227 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193436295461 0.218282227539 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626986096523 0.0743258471296 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0507685719584 0.0701772020484 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128708339149 0.128457276422 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454121584704 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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