Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the argument above, Author conclude that to make their graduates to secure better job, the university should terminate student evaluation of professor. The author make the conclusion based on the evidence that with this evaluation process only increase on the student grades but student are unsuccessful to get better job when they are graduate from university. However author come out to this conclusion without firm and complete evidence, so for better substantiation of this argument author need to evaluate the evidences.
Evidence concerning student rise in average grade point by 30 percent which was only given by the professor without regarding the student performance seems illogical. Rise in grade is depending on different factor such as student performance, enrollment of quality of students, teaching pattern of teacher and nature of students. It is possible that professors might change his/ her teaching and evaluation pattern bitterly than 15 years ago. If the professor gave the grade without evaluating the performance, some of the student would not satisfy this process and he/she would inclined to complain the university administrations. Perhaps, it might be true that, student laboriously studied to get better grades from the professor. If this true, the argument might not hold water.
Evidence regarding the grades at Alpha University, if the grade point Average at Alpha University are also high similar to those at Omega University, then the graduates of this university are securing jobs more easily than the graduates from omega university for factor unrelated to grades. Perhaps Alpha University has better alumni that allow its graduates to find employment more easily.
Evidence regarding the securing of jobs after graduates from Omega University depends on the student inclination toward the jobs. Perhaps, the student passed out from this university are seeking for better opportunity such further study, preparation for high level jobs, spending time for applying international university. It is possible that Alpha University graduate don’t practice this activities for further career development but settled on jobs of low quality.
In conclusion, author need to evaluate above evidence for making his argument strong and logical. He should analyze his argument in term of different other factor such as student quality, inclination toward jobs, teaching pattern etc. Doing so, then argument will be valid.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 2032 1500
No. of Different Words: 174 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.39 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.733 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 163 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.562 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.47 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.61 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.156 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'makes'.
Suggestion: makes
...ent evaluation of professor. The author make the conclusion based on the evidence th...
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Line 1, column 366, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...when they are graduate from university. However author come out to this conclusion with...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...formance seems illogical. Rise in grade is depending on different factor such as student per...
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Line 3, column 512, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ade without evaluating the performance, some of the student would not satisfy this process ...
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Line 3, column 580, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'incline'
Suggestion: incline
...t satisfy this process and he/she would inclined to complain the university administrati...
^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 391, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...University graduate don't practice this activities for further career developme...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, then, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 375.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.57066666667 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79780739548 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485333333333 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 668.7 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.9530926078 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.882352941 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0588235294 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182987458858 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.06520270825 0.0743258471296 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457761424044 0.0701772020484 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101417274584 0.128457276422 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413438694085 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 14.3799401198 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.22 48.3550499002 67% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.5979740519 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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