The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
Section 2. Analytical Writing
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The above passage claims that Dr Field’s conclusion is incorrect and that interview-centered method is more accurate that the observation-centered approach. I find that it required some more evidence and proofs to accurately assert that the above claims are precisely correct.
The first evidence that would be required is the changes that have occurred during the 20 years span of time in the island of Tertia. As Dr Field has conducted his research 20 years ago and Dr Karp interviewed the children after 20 years, there are chances that the people of Tertia have adopted some changes in their culture for upbringing their children and hence we cannot positively say whether Dr Field’s conclusion are incorrect.
The second evidence that we required is the exact geographic location in island of Tertia where the Dr Field conducted his research. Because in the passage it is stated that Dr Karp conducted his interviews with “children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia”. There are possibilities that in other islands (aside from Tertia), the child-rearing culture may be different from the culture of Tertia and that’s why the children over there be talking about their biological parents.
To proceed further and make accurate conclusions, I also require the notes or scripts of conversations that occur during the interview between children and Dr Karp. What were the questions asked to them exactly by the graduate students who interviewed them. As there are chances that the questions asked to the children were biased and asked only regarding the biological parents and thus the children replies were lying totally in that domain. Then we cannot assuredly say that how and whom they were raised with?
The last evidence that would be required is regarding to accuracy of the methods. One cannot claim that any particular method is accurate by just on the basis of results of one experiment/study. Further examples/more number of studies and their results are required to prove the validity of a particular method. Hence Dr Karp asserting that interview-centered approach is much more accurate than observation-centered approach is inevident.
To summarise, certain evidences are required to further evaluate this argument by Dr Karp and to prove the validity of his research. We require the changes that have occurred in island of Tertia during the period of 20 years, the location of research where Dr Field conducted his study, script for the interview conversation and more study examples based on the culture study (at different locations) using observation-centered and interview-centered approaches.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 2176 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.014 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 89 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.53 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.529 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.341 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...re the Dr Field conducted his research. Because in the passage it is stated that Dr Kar...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...sis of results of one experiment/study. Further examples/more number of studies and the...
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Line 5, column 312, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ve the validity of a particular method. Hence Dr Karp asserting that interview-center...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 461, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ered and interview-centered approaches.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, thus, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 13.6137724551 184% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 419.0 441.139720559 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31026252983 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15047009275 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443914081146 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 683.1 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.7700647034 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.882352941 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6470588235 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.52941176471 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250308990327 0.218282227539 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859490274049 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707495619107 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141817362081 0.128457276422 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0843934329275 0.0628817314937 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.3799401198 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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