The following appeared in a memo from the new vice president of Sartorian, a company that manufactures men's clothing.
"Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The memo from the new vice president of the company that manufactures men's clothing claims that they should resume production of alpaca overcoats as they have found a new reliable fabric supplier and assumes that people would be interested in buying them at higher costs leading to the company's profit. While concluding this in the memo, no strong evidence is provided to back up these claims by the vice president. Perhaps if these assumptions are not substantiated with strong evidence it won't lead to the company's profit it may turn another way around.
Firstly, the vice president assumes that the new supplier is supplying good quality of fabrics than the previous supplier. However, the new fabric supplier may be supplying equitable quality only as that of the previous one or might have sent a sample of good quality than actual raw material. There are no firm reports provided on which basis the fabric quality was tested and was found to be better. It is also possible that good quality is commensurated with greater price. How is the quality of fabric better than the previous supplier? remains unanswered and severely weakens the author's claim.
Secondly, the company stopped production of alpaca overcoats over five years ago and the author still assumes that people would buy it, backing up by evidence that their competitors have also stopped production of the same. Perhaps, it might be the case that competitors of the company stopped production of these overcoats because people no longer invest in them. As we all know fashion is always fleeting it changes from time to time. Considering people would still choose to buy the alpaca overcoats will be overly optimistic. If there is no evidence found for people being interested in the product would greatly affect the vice president's claims for restarting the production of alpaca overcoats.
Additionally, the author assumes that people would be willing to pay higher costs for the product considering the inflation. However, there is no verification done for the same. People may be expecting the same or lower prices for the alpaca overcoats as their production was stopped long ago, and consider this to be its relaunch providing them the opportunity to buy them at lower prices. If this happens company would be incurring a loss instead of a profit. So assuming that people would consider buying alpaca overcoats at higher prices does not reciprocate that company will be in profit.
In conclusion, the vice president might have thought of this state as a profitable one and optimistically concluded in the memo to resume production of alpaca coats as they found a new supplier. If the above-mentioned questions remain unanswered then the claim made by the vice president can be found unwarranted to be true. This might be the right opportunity for the company to bring back their alpaca coats in production only after doing more research and planning it.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 486 350
No. of Characters: 2416 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.695 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.971 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.648 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 184 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.143 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.553 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.323 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ics than the previous supplier. However, the new fabric supplier may be supplying...
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Line 2, column 543, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Remains
...bric better than the previous supplier? remains unanswered and severely weakens the aut...
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Line 3, column 365, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ecause people no longer invest in them. As we all know fashion is always fleeting ...
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Line 4, column 392, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...pportunity to buy them at lower prices. If this happens company would be incurring...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...aca coats as they found a new supplier. If the above-mentioned questions remain un...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, while, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 28.8173652695 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2448.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 485.0 441.139720559 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04742268041 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68425576949 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424742268041 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.73040275 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.272727273 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0454545455 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31818181818 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.20758483034 183% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.207025723539 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665727096955 0.0743258471296 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0603157750252 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125166035829 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488685376176 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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