The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
An article in a business magazine states that there is a correlation between the success of an advertising firm and the number of hours of sleep required by their executives . So the author uses this idea to conclude that , for prosperity of a business,only people who require less than 6 hours of sleep must be hired . However this conclusion can be justified ,only if the following questions can be answered .
The study mentioned in the article tells us that there is a relation between the success of a company and the number of hours of sleep required by its employees . But how can we assume that the number of hours of sleep is the only metric that contributes to the employee's productivity . Maybe the executives who require lesser amount of sleep are very skilled at their jobs , which could be the reason for the fast growth of the company . So the argument prematurely assumes that a company’s success is only defined by the number of hours of sleep of it’s associates.
The author of this article draws the given conclusion based on the study conducted on executives of advertising firms . How can we know if the same results can be expected for all businesses? There could be businesses , which rely on the creativity of their employees , for which they need to be well rested , requiring a higher amount of sleep . Amount of sleep required by a person also depends on various factors like age , workload etc. Social and physical demographics of employees can vary from business to business. Hence it is wrong to assume that the reason for the success of advertising firms can be extrapolated to all businesses . So the argument takes a flawed stance by generalizing the results obtained from a very specific study.
In conclusion , the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed , due to its reliance on various unwarranted assumptions . If the author can provide more evidence (perhaps a more detailed study about success of firms which includes people from various businesses) , it could be possible to discern if hiring people who require lesser amount of sleep will be beneficial to the success of a business.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 362 350
No. of Characters: 1724 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.362 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.762 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.695 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.133 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.788 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.112 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...less than 6 hours of sleep must be hired . However this conclusion can be justifie...
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...hours of sleep required by its employees . But how can we assume that the number o...
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...eason for the fast growth of the company . So the argument prematurely assumes tha...
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...defined by the number of hours of sleep of it’s associates. The author of this article draws th...
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...ll businesses? There could be businesses , which rely on the creativity of their e...
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... as it stands now is considerably flawed , due to its reliance on various unwarran...
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...iance on various unwarranted assumptions . If the author can provide more evidence...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, so, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 361.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89473684211 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80888356288 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437673130194 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 705.55239521 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.3382603795 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.4375 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5625 23.324526521 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6875 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 26.0 5.25449101796 495% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222700145882 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887161990446 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896130982512 0.0701772020484 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154314690878 0.128457276422 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0650803388072 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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