The following appeared in a report of the Committee on Faculty Promotions and Salaries at Elm City University.
"During her seventeen years as a professor of botany, Professor Thomas has proved herself to be well worth her annual salary of $50,000. Her classes are among the largest at the university, demonstrating her popularity among students. Moreover, the money she has brought to the university in research grants has exceeded her salary in each of the last two years. Therefore, in consideration of Professor Thomas' demonstrated teaching and research abilities, we recommend that she receive a $10,000 raise and a promotion to Department Chairperson; without such a raise and promotion, we fear that Professor Thomas will leave Elm City University for another college."
In the report of the committee of faculty promotions and salary at Elm city university (ELM), it is stated that the salary of professor Thomas should be raised by $10,000 because she has demonstrated an outstanding research and lecturing abilities. The raise in salary is also to prevent her form departing from the university.To substantiate this assertion, it was said that her classes are amogst the largest in EML. Also, she has brought grants exceedin her salary to the university in the last two years. This argument is based on alot of unsubstantiated evidence and therefore it's logically flawed.
To begin with, the author assumed that since the professors class is among the largest in EML university, it must bee dur to the fact that it is very popular among the students. It is entirely possible that her class been among the largest is due to the fact that the university admits more students in the faculty of botany than other faculties of the universities. Perhaps, botany is one of the compulsory courses that is required to be taken by all students if the university. If any of this assumptions is true, then the author needs to provide more evidence
In addition, even if her classes are amogst the largest at the university, the author also assumed that she has brought a research grants exceeding her salary to the university without any evidence to substantiate this. Perhaps the grant awarded to the university was due to the collective effort of everyone in the university. It is entirely possible that she has nothing to do with the grant awarded to the university. It is entirely possible that the grant awarded during her tenure was the hard work of the tenure before her. Without evidence to substantiate this, I cannot agree with the author's conclusion.
Finally, even if the grants awarded to the university was due to the hard work of professor Thomas, it is unjustly fair for the author to assume that raising her salary by $10, 000 will keep her at the university. It is entirely possible that she would still leave the university even if her salary is raised. Without evidence form professor Thomas agreeing to stay if her salary will be raised, the assumption is therefore based on faulty reasoning. Perhaps, professor Thomas does not even have any intention of leaving the university because her motivation for staying at the university is because she enjoys what she does and blnot even because of her pay.
In sum, the argument is unconvincing as it stands. For me to properly evaluation this assertion, the author would have to provide evidence to support the fact that professor Thomas's hard work is responsible for the grant awarded to the university. An statitcal evidence showing the number of students admitted to the faculty of botany in relation to those admitted throughout the university. And also, an evidence that professor Thomas is willing to stay if her salary is raised by $10,000 .
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 10 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2392 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.794 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.664 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 183 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 134 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.837 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.441 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.247 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
... her form departing from the university.To substantiate this assertion, it was sai...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e and therefore its logically flawed. To begin with, the author assumed that s...
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Line 2, column 494, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...l students if the university. If any of this assumptions is true, then the author ne...
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Line 2, column 566, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he author needs to provide more evidence In addition, even if her classes are amo...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...uthor also assumed that she has brought a research grants exceeding her salary to the univ...
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Line 3, column 594, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...stantiate this, I cannot agree with the authors conclusion. Finally, even if the grant...
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Line 4, column 100, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ue to the hard work of professor Thomas, it is unjustly fair for the author to as...
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Line 4, column 458, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...fore based on faulty reasoning. Perhaps, professor Thomas does not even have any ...
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Line 5, column 248, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'A' instead of 'An' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: A
...or the grant awarded to the university. An statitcal evidence showing the number o...
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Line 5, column 487, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...to stay if her salary is raised by 0,000 .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, if, so, still, then, therefore, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 28.8173652695 194% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2433.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 498.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88554216867 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74653374577 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.385542168675 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 798.3 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.2411258597 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.65 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.9 23.324526521 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.65 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.361914301293 0.218282227539 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123086159048 0.0743258471296 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10251275651 0.0701772020484 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226593822275 0.128457276422 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0984601503363 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.5979740519 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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