'The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
“Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station’s coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence would be needed in order to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Given argument presents an idea of restoring the time devoted to local news and weather reports in a telivision station to its fromer level. While presenting this idea the author has stated certain points to support the argument such as, increase in the devoted time to national news, complaints regarding local and weather news and finally the cancellations of local bussiness that used to adverstise during the late night. After stating all these points the author has concluded that time devovted to local and weather news is to be restored to former level inorder to avoid losing any further advertising revenues.
However, these statements are not supported by any strong evidence to withstand any opposition against them. Firstly, it is mentioned that the time devoted to naitonal news has been increased over the past year. But there was no evidence stating that this was just coincidental and has no reason to deal with the revenue of station. This change might be more vital than it appears, the station might have acquired more viewers outside the local region, or there could have been a very important, national level scenarios running around such as an election or a war which should have caused the importance in telecasting national news more important as it increases the viewership of station. Which rises the revenue further, oppsoing the conclusion.
As mentioned in the argument, there had been complaints received from the viewers about the coverage of weather and local news. But there was no evidence that these complaints were about the time devoted to local and weather news. These complaints could have been lodged on the quality of local and weather news that most of them turned out to be false. This is no where mentioned in the argument.
Further, it is stated that local bussiness that used to advertise during late-night news have cancelled their contracts. But, it is not clear about the reason why they cancelled the contracts. There could have been numerous reasons to cancel the contract. Their companies could have been bankrupted and not in a position to put their revenue on adversting. There is no evidence stating that reduction in number of local viewers was the reason. Infact, there was no evidence that the numebr of local viewers to the station has been reduced.
Finally, the points stated by the author are not supported by any established to evidence to stand a chance agianst opposing the proposal. The station might have acquired more national-wide viewers now, and been hoping to expand further to acquire more national wide clients and bussinesses rather than limiting themselves to a local rergion.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Given argument presents an idea of restoring the time devoted to local news and weather reports in a telivision station to its fromer level.
Error: fromer Suggestion: former
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: telivision Suggestion: television
Sentence: While presenting this idea the author has stated certain points to support the argument such as, increase in the devoted time to national news, complaints regarding local and weather news and finally the cancellations of local bussiness that used to adverstise during the late night.
Error: bussiness Suggestion: business
Error: adverstise Suggestion: advertise
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: After stating all these points the author has concluded that time devovted to local and weather news is to be restored to former level inorder to avoid losing any further advertising revenues.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: inorder Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: devovted Suggestion: devoted
Sentence: Firstly, it is mentioned that the time devoted to naitonal news has been increased over the past year.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: naitonal Suggestion: national
Sentence: This change might be more vital than it appears, the station might have acquired more viewers outside the local region, or there could have been a very important, national level scenarios running around such as an election or a war which should have caused the importance in telecasting national news more important as it increases the viewership of station.
Error: news Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: viewership Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: telecasting Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Which rises the revenue further, oppsoing the conclusion.
Error: oppsoing Suggestion: opposing
Sentence: Further, it is stated that local bussiness that used to advertise during late-night news have cancelled their contracts.
Error: bussiness Suggestion: business
Sentence: Their companies could have been bankrupted and not in a position to put their revenue on adversting.
Error: adversting Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Infact, there was no evidence that the numebr of local viewers to the station has been reduced.
Error: numebr Suggestion: number
Sentence: Finally, the points stated by the author are not supported by any established to evidence to stand a chance agianst opposing the proposal.
Error: agianst Suggestion: against
Sentence: The station might have acquired more national-wide viewers now, and been hoping to expand further to acquire more national wide clients and bussinesses rather than limiting themselves to a local rergion.
Error: bussinesses Suggestion: businesses
Error: rergion Suggestion: region
Error: national-wide Suggestion: national wide
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Need to argue against the conclusion always. For this topic it is:
Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 19 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 438 350
No. of Characters: 2177 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.575 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.97 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.493 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 161 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 78 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.012 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.337 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.545 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.118 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 363, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...of them turned out to be false. This is no where mentioned in the argument. Fu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, however, regarding, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 438.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08447488584 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55174447926 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.438356164384 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 705.55239521 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.8588505121 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.35 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.295662019784 0.218282227539 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10127079074 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105779482546 0.0701772020484 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178464119222 0.128457276422 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107578531145 0.0628817314937 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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