The following recommendation was made by the president and administrative staff of Grove College, a private institution, to the college's governing committee.
"We recommend that Grove College preserve its century-old tradition of all-female education rather than admit men into its programs. It is true that a majority of faculty members voted in favor of coeducation, arguing that it would encourage more students to apply to Grove. But 80 percent of the students responding to a survey conducted by the student government wanted the school to remain all female, and over half of the alumnae who answered a separate survey also opposed coeducation. Keeping the college all female will improve morale among students and convince alumnae to keep supporting the college financially."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument states that Grove College should continue to admit only female students, rather that adding new male students, and opposing the favour of co-education. The President arrives to this conclusion as part of some survey results done on students and alumnae. However, there are three unstated assumption which needs evidence, without which the conclusion of the argument remains weakened.
Firstly, the argument assumes that in the survey conducted on the students, where 80 percent of the students supported all female model, the author fails to provide evidence about the number and variety of students considered in the survey. It might be possible that the “80 percent” students were of the same class and hence the result is highly partial. Even if there are mixture of students from various sections, a possibility that only the students who were a supporter of feminism, took part in the survey. If the above points stay unanswered by the author, they undermine the assumption that “80 percent” of the student responded in against of coeducation in the survey.
Secondly, another assumption is made when the author states that over half of the alumnae voted in favour of school remaining to be all female. Although the survey results informed that majority of the alumni who participated in the survey voted against co-education, the author fails to provide evidence about the number of alumnae participating in the survey. The results could have been different in case if all the alumni, from oldest batches to the newest ones, took part in the survey. As the arguments stands now, without the information about people participating in the survey, is flawed.
Finally, the author assumes that continuing with the all-female school will convince the alumnae to support the school financially. It might be the case that even if the school admits male students, the alumnae would still support their school as part of their love and affection. Furthermore, admitting male students can possibly increase the financial support that the school will receive once those male students also pass out and contribute to the alumni group of Grove college. Hence, admission of male students can possibly might not affect, or even improve, the financial help that the college receives from their alumnae.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 372 350
No. of Characters: 1890 1500
No. of Different Words: 169 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.392 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.081 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.502 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 109 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.101 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.607 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.14 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
...mnae. However, there are three unstated assumption which needs evidence, without which the...
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Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'assumption' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'assumptions'.
Suggestion: assumptions
...mnae. However, there are three unstated assumption which needs evidence, without which the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'from the oldest'.
Suggestion: from the oldest
...en different in case if all the alumni, from oldest batches to the newest ones, took part i...
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Line 7, column 319, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...n. Furthermore, admitting male students can possibly increase the financial support that the...
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Line 7, column 518, Rule ID: MAY_COULD_POSSIBLY[1]
Message: Use simply 'can'.
Suggestion: can
...lege. Hence, admission of male students can possibly might not affect, or even improve, the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1953.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 372.0 441.139720559 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6121218244 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47311827957 0.468620217663 101% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6151380794 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.2 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 5.70786347227 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0711059007499 0.218282227539 33% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0275186453864 0.0743258471296 37% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0384276823657 0.0701772020484 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0506559231473 0.128457276422 39% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361790448964 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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