The following report appeared in the newsletter of the West Meria Public Health Council.
"An innovative treatment has come to our attention that promises to significantly reduce absenteeism in our schools and workplaces. A study reports that in nearby East Meria, where fish consumption is very high, people visit the doctor only once or twice per year for the treatment of colds. Clearly, eating a substantial amount of fish can prevent colds. Since colds represent the most frequently given reason for absences from school and work, we recommend the daily use of Ichthaid — a nutritional supplement derived from fish oil — as a good way to prevent colds and lower absenteeism."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
A report from the newsletter section of the West Meria Public Health Council claims that, to prevent absenteeism form workplaces, people should use a nutritional supplement called 'Ichthaid' regularly, which can be found in fish, as it helps to prevent cold. The author has come to this conclusion based on the unwarranted assumptions from a vague study that reports that, people of East Meria who consume more fish and tend to get less affected by cold. However, this assumption is flawed for numerous reasons.
To begin with, the assumptions fails to provide any justification that the city of East Maria and West Meria are similar in terms of their respective weather. For instance, the weather of East maria could be warmer and more healthier. Therefore, people living on that city may be less susceptible to cold and other cold related diseases. To draw an illustration, people living in East Asia are less vulnerable to cold related diseases as the weather is warmer comparing to the Western countries, where it is necessary to take flu shots before winter. Therefore, it is very unlikely that food habits plays an important role in this regard.
Secondly, the author also leaves many other unanswered questions. For instance, the study does not provide any information about the life style of the people. The people living nearby East Meria may be more conscious about their health than the individuals living in West Meria. They may spend most of their leisure time in gym doing physical exercise which is key to keep the body fit and sound. On the other hand population of West Meria may not be interested in exercise and hence they are more vulnerable to diseases, and it could be a major cause of getting cold.
Finally, the author does not take any environmental issue into his account. For instance, the West Meria could be located in a hazardous place while East Meria could be more green and fresh. The environment plays an important role to the public health. Hence, if the environment of West Meria is not improved, then it's population may still be vulnerable to cold, even after consuming more fish.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed for several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to more information about the above issues and offer more evidence (perhaps in the form of a systematic study), then it may strengthen the argument.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 404 350
No. of Characters: 1943 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.483 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.809 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.573 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 88 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.635 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.789 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...ather of East maria could be warmer and more healthier. Therefore, people living on that city ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2001.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 404.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95297029703 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67272982312 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497524752475 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.3089040923 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.315789474 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 23.324526521 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.10526315789 5.70786347227 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157584620116 0.218282227539 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0489712806032 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0535714185778 0.0701772020484 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0894915906931 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599823145518 0.0628817314937 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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