"The following was used as part of an internet advertising company's appeal to businesses: Furniture Depot employed our internet advertising company to help. Since then its sales increased by 10% over last year's totals. Furniture Depot's success demonstrates how using our internet services can increase your profitability. "
Describe how well reasoned you find this argument. In the discussion be sure to analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example, you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the argument's conclusion. You may also address possible changes in the argument that would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything, would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
In today's technological world, where the internet is ubiquitous, employing internet advertising surely augments the sales.I think the argument is not sufficiently well reasoned and I believe the argument should have been elaborated, meaning, how exactly the internet advertising service helped augment the sales, because it may happen that Improvement in the quality of the product could have caused the augmented sales or the marketing techniques devised by the depot could have caused the increase in sales.
The statement should incorporate the embellished explanation of how the internet services helped the furniture depot in increasing the sales. For example, the numbers of orders placed on the online portal should be displayed. Showing that the customers bought products after viewing the advertisements on the internet would bolster the statement. If the sales were increased because of a new and robust marketing scheme devised by the depot and not because of the internet advertisement service, then this may weaken the statement.
Along with the furniture depot's increased sales record, the internet advertising company should also provide detailed records of other companies augmented sales which were caused because of their internet advertisement services. Providing more numbers of records would bolster the statement.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
It is not on the right track. read a sample:
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 200 350
No. of Characters: 1121 1500
No. of Different Words: 106 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.761 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.605 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.809 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 97 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 77 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 20.982 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.457 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 123, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...t advertising surely augments the sales.I think the argument is not sufficiently ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, may, so, then, well, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 19.6327345309 31% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 18.0 55.5748502994 32% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1143.0 2260.96107784 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 199.0 441.139720559 45% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.74371859296 5.12650576532 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.75589349951 4.56307096286 82% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8545190635 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 204.123752495 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552763819095 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 358.2 705.55239521 51% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 140.597558547 57.8364921388 243% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 163.285714286 119.503703932 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.28571428571 5.70786347227 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243298025398 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114723590835 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879929789843 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179963164848 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0363758486752 0.0628817314937 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.8 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 26.14 48.3550499002 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.6 12.197005988 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.5979740519 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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