The government has decided to vacate 50 kms of residential plots to replace them with new housing under their latest scheme. they believe that the old houses don't match their idea of being a developed city. This new scheme will beautify the city. They also think that once this is accomplished, a lot of nuisance in the form of noisy teenagers conducting illegal activities will stop which is a win-win situation.
The government has decided to vacate 50kms of residential plots and plans to replace them with new housing under their latest scheme. Their reason going forward seems to develop the city and beautify it. They believe if all goes according to their plan, the nuisance caused by teenagers involved in illegal activities will be stopped. Although it appears to be a win-win situation for everyone, there as some gaps in their logic which suggests this is more of a propaganda scheme than a development initiative.
Firstly, the plan to relocate 50 kms of residential area for the period of re-construction is a big issue as the residents will simply not unilaterally agree upon such an action. Even if they agree, the construction being completed within the given time frame is not guaranteed taking into account the slow government process of documentation and providing sanctions. Secondly, beatification of the city is hardly an issue , what the city actually needs is better transportation and basic facilities. The area of re-construction and timing of the proposal seem very politically aligned, as majority of voters from the area are against the political party and with the upcoming elections the re-construction would not be completed. This seems more of a scheme to drive opposition voters out of the city, while the election season is near.
Furthermore, the issue with teenagers is not because of undeveloped area or less beautification. The massive unemployment rates are forcing them into conducting illegal activities. So, development of housing will not curb the issue as promised.
Hence, the argument is full of holes and should not be agreed upon.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 269 350
No. of Characters: 1368 1500
No. of Different Words: 160 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.086 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.985 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.692 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.09 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.615 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.311 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.402 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.027 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 423, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ification of the city is hardly an issue , what the city actually needs is better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, second, secondly, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 13.6137724551 7% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 28.8173652695 42% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 55.5748502994 65% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1400.0 2260.96107784 62% => OK
No of words: 269.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20446096654 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05593936983 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.613382899628 0.468620217663 131% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7616544463 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.692307692 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 5.70786347227 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364556118695 0.218282227539 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114145534831 0.0743258471296 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125990648319 0.0701772020484 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179207457136 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.172016902142 0.0628817314937 274% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 98.500998004 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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