There is a position that due to most of the roller-skating accidents involving riders without any protective gear, it can be assumed that often severe injuries could be prevented simply by wearing high-quality equipment. Although, from first glance such position might seem logical, overall this notion is flawed due to some reasons and lack of certain data, which I will explain in next paragraphs.
Firstly, it is stated that as 75 percent of people who had accidents in parking lots or streets had no protective equipment. It is logical to assume that most of the time people, who get injured by skating, are the ones who believe in their experience too much and count themselves as “experts” and thus try to do the most perennial moves. It should also be considered that such “veterans” of the sport often believe that protective gear is only essential for amateurs, as “experts” do not have any chance of having accidents. Thus, it is necessary to get the data and be sure if people who had no gear during accidents, were doing dangerous moves and counted themselves experienced in sport or not.
Secondly, it is claimed that having protective gear and reflective equipment will surely decrease the risk of severe injuries. To confirm such claim it is essential to prove that safety clothing is indeed has the possibility of protecting from severe damage. There is a chance that protective gear can only prevent surface level scratches, and it is not able to prevent from broken bones or deep wounds. Thus, data about accidents which include safety equipment should also be analyzed in order to detect the degree of damage it can protect from.
Thirdly, hospital statistics provided can simply be exaggerated or flawed. It is possible that instead of accepting the fault of doing dangerous moves, patients tried to falsify their “story” of accidents and persuade doctors that it all happened due to non-existent protective clothing in order to avoid embarrassment or even legal actions. Thus, identifying the main reason of the injury is important to get to the roots of the problem. Maybe, instead of blaming everything on gear, people should take accountability for doing dangerous moves and giving false information to doctors.
In conclusion, to decide whether the main issue of getting serious injuries is lack of safety equipment, correctness of data should be checked. Also, the degree to which such clothing can protect from must be researched through analyzing accidents which involved skaters with gear equipment. Lastly, the patients should be asked if the reason for the injury is the lack of gear or their confidence.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 435 350
No. of Characters: 2150 1500
No. of Different Words: 206 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.567 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.943 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.648 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.588 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.934 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.33 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.049 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 621, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...people who had no gear during accidents, were doing dangerous moves and counted t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 2260.96107784 98% => OK
No of words: 435.0 441.139720559 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11034482759 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81485405586 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503448275862 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0149918918 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.764705882 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5882352941 23.324526521 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 6.88822355289 218% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185242406502 0.218282227539 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0677193020114 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101129910529 0.0701772020484 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0985769629802 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0719196332259 0.0628817314937 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.3799401198 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.32208582834 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 98.500998004 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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