many lives could be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of inoculations, we cannot permit the cow flu inoculations to be administered routinely.
In the above given statement the author assumes that many lives could be saved if the inoculation of cow flu is administered to "all" people, which sounds absolutely ridiculous and not pragmatic at all.
Here when author himself is not sure that it is 100 percent sure that the inoculation is is better way to cure the disease: as he himself states the possibility of death as a result of inoculation, how could he conclude that it is a better idea to inoculate all people of the area where cow flu is detected. It's not just the people who are suffering from cow flu, the author is talking about the healthy people as well.
As ridiculous as it sounds it is even dangerous to do so, the inoculation might even lead to many other problems and side effect for the people who are not even suffering from it. It is absolutely not practicable at all. However, the later part of the statement seems reasonable as nobody would like to risk their life inoculating themselves just considering that they are preventing the cow flu virus that might or might not attack them. But the 'small possibility' mentioned in the paragraph is the possibility of someone's life or death and it cannot be taken so lightly.
Here, the best way to solve the problem is to perform further research and insure nobody's like is at stake especially the one who are not even suffering from the cow flu at the first place. Finding other alternatives that are safer is other way to solve the problem.
Hence, the author needs to carry out some more research on the details about the cons and pros of the inoculation.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
it is like an issue assay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 284 350
No. of Characters: 1276 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.105 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.493 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.545 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 73 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 53 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.959 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.697 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 87, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...s 100 percent sure that the inoculation is is better way to cure the disease: as he h...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, so, well, talking about, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1319.0 2260.96107784 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 284.0 441.139720559 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64436619718 5.12650576532 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64495220528 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 705.55239521 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.4769091732 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.9 119.503703932 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246742899118 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865220988902 0.0743258471296 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0712451204101 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120676830238 0.128457276422 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0901912165118 0.0628817314937 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.3550499002 107% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 12.5979740519 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 98.500998004 50% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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