Many lives might be saved if inoculations against cow flu were routinely administered to all people in areas where the disease is detected. However, since there is a small possibility that a person will die as a result of the inoculations, we cannot permit inoculations against cow flu to be routinely administered.
Here the author is trying to prohibit the use of vaccinations for the cowflu in some area where it is prevailant.Here the author is equivocaling. In the first sentence author mentions that if the inoculations are given to people then many lives might be saved and then in the next sentence he concludes that as there is a little possibility of a person dieing because of the vaccination so it cannot be routinely administered.
The first evidence is needed is that how effective is the medicine of vaccination. By simply just stating that lives can be saved we cannot say that it will not result into any future disease or some kind of disorder in the patient. So, firstly we need the working of the inoculation and the gurantee that it will be effective in curing the cowflu.Also, it is not given that giving this inoculation will definately result in decrease in the number of case of cowflu. Maybe the person having inoculation might not die but it is not stated anywhere that there is not a possibility of the person still getting infected.
Second evidence we need is that how "small" is the possibility that a person will die because of the inoculations that is given to them. Is there any report that states that? Basically argument is missing some statistical data about the working or effectiveness of the inoculations. If we think from the utilitarian point of view then some might agree that the if by giving the innoculations some people may die there is a greater chance for the rest of them surviving. In this case some people might approve for the inoculations.
Also, it is not mentioned whether the disease is contiguous or not? Means can it spread very fast or it remains just in the person who is affected by the cowflu.Also, we are not sure that the person that dies because of the inoculations is having some kind of medication already going on. That is a person is already suffering from high blood pressure and giving him the inoculations might result in some complication for him.Also it is not mentioned anywhere that cowflu can cause death. If the cowflu is not causing any death then it might be not necessary for everyone to take the inoculations.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 386 350
No. of Characters: 1766 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.432 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.575 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.673 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.733 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.407 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.733 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.546 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.181 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Here
...flu in some area where it is prevailant.Here the author is equivocaling. In the firs...
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Line 1, column 371, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ossibility of a person dieing because of the vaccination so it cannot be routinel...
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Line 3, column 349, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Also
... will be effective in curing the cowflu.Also, it is not given that giving this inocu...
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Line 5, column 279, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...bout the working or effectiveness of the inoculations. If we think from the utili...
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Line 7, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Also
...he person who is affected by the cowflu.Also, we are not sure that the person that d...
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Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: Also
...ght result in some complication for him.Also it is not mentioned anywhere that cowfl...
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Line 7, column 427, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...ght result in some complication for him.Also it is not mentioned anywhere that cowfl...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, so, still, then, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 55.5748502994 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75130890052 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89877113599 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 204.123752495 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.416230366492 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.4157910944 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 119.503703932 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4666666667 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.53333333333 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300795130664 0.218282227539 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0996260755591 0.0743258471296 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707037046013 0.0701772020484 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194253979663 0.128457276422 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0475416542453 0.0628817314937 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.3550499002 95% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.5979740519 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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