Nature's Way, a chain of stores selling health food and other health-related products, is opening its next franchise in the town of Plainsville. The store should prove to be very successful: Nature's Way franchises tend to be most profitable in areas where residents lead healthy lives, and clearly Plainsville is such an area. Plainsville merchants report that sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs. The local health club has more members than ever, and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full. Finally, Plainsville's schoolchildren represent a new generation of potential customers: these schoolchildren are required to participate in a fitness-for-life program, which emphasizes the benefits of regular exercise at an early age.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author conclude here that Nature’s Way should prove to be very successful in the town of Plainville as it sells health food and product related to health. The author expectation is based on the fact that a chain of this Franchises used to be profitable in an area like Plainville where resident leads a healthy lifestyle. The argument fails to mention several key factors, on the basis of which it could be evaluated. To justify this conclusion, the authors notes the classes are full with the interested members in health club, beside the health club the author also has mentioned about the high sale of exercise clothing and shoes for running. Beside these the author point out that the Plainville’s school children as the potential customer for the store, as the children are required to participate in a fitness for life program. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s recommendation. Hence the argument can be considered incomplete or unsubstantiated.
First of all, in the argument the author readily believes on the report of the Plainville merchant, which declares the sale of the running shoes and clothing related to exercise are relative high. This is merely an assumption made without much solid ground. The sale might be high at present because the sale of the clothing are running on for stock clearance .The merchants reports has not mentioned that such a high sale runs whole the year. For example, in my country Nepal, the clothing stores open sale twice in a year for winter clearance and for summer clearance. Hence the argument would have been much more convincing if the timing of the high sale was mentioned in the report of Plainville merchant.
Secondly, the argument readily points out that local health clubs has comparatively high members relatively. This again is a weak and unsupported claim as it does not demonstrate the numbers of health clubs in the town. The members are high, this is because such a local club is very limited in the area. Here in the arguments the author mentions about a single club. What about the other club? May be the author is elaborating on the only cheap health club with high members. If this is truewe can imagine the people living in such a town might be poor. And of course it is out of imagination that a poverty town might live a healthy life style which costs high rate. The people might have joined the health club because they have problem with their health and health club might be only the option for physical exercise. In such cases, how can someone say Plainville leads a healthy lifestyle? If the argument has provided clear data regarding the health club then it would have been a lot more convincing to the reader.
Finally, the author notes that Plainville’s school children represent the new potential customers as the schools have created the rule for the participation of the children in the fitness program. However, careful scrutiny of the evidence reveals that it provides little credible support for the author’s conclusion in several critical respects, and raises several skeptical questions. To illustrate further, Will all the children will be interested to the fitness? What if the rule of the school changes with the change in administration? Without convincing answers to these question, the reader is left with the impression that claims made by the author are more of a wishful thinking rather than substantive evidence.
In conclusion, the author’s argument is unpersuasive as it stands. To bolster it further, the author must provide more concrete evidence, perhaps by way of a reliable first hand research on the Plainville town regarding their lifestyles. Finally, to better assess the argument, it would be necessary to know more information how and why the town of Plainville leads a healthy lifestyle.
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Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not exactly. look: sales of running shoes and exercise clothing are at all-time highs.
argument 2 -- also need to argue: and the weight training and aerobics classes are always full.
argument 3 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 31 15
No. of Words: 648 350
No. of Characters: 3168 1500
No. of Different Words: 265 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.045 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.889 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.6 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 235 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 180 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 116 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 62 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.903 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.372 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.548 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.283 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.452 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.064 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 225, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...on is based on the fact that a chain of this Franchises used to be profitable in an ...
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Line 1, column 332, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ere resident leads a healthy lifestyle. The argument fails to mention several key f...
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Line 1, column 978, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...t for the author's recommendation. Hence the argument can be considered incomple...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...thing are running on for stock clearance .The merchants reports has not mentioned ...
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Line 3, column 362, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ing are running on for stock clearance .The merchants reports has not mentioned tha...
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Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'report'.
Suggestion: report
...g on for stock clearance .The merchants reports has not mentioned that such a high sale...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ter clearance and for summer clearance. Hence the argument would have been much more ...
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Line 3, column 689, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...high sale was mentioned in the report of Plainville merchant. Secondly, the ar...
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Line 5, column 400, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (May) must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...le club. What about the other club? May be the author is elaborating on the only c...
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Line 5, column 478, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ly cheap health club with high members. If this is truewe can imagine the people l...
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Line 5, column 896, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y Plainville leads a healthy lifestyle? If the argument has provided clear data re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, of course, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3270.0 2260.96107784 145% => OK
No of words: 648.0 441.139720559 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0462962963 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.04537849152 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80095270878 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 204.123752495 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424382716049 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 997.2 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 19.7664670659 157% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7301289724 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.483870968 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9032258065 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41935483871 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206451242434 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572470852021 0.0743258471296 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.077294095281 0.0701772020484 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115015665597 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0878416973732 0.0628817314937 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 98.500998004 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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