Despite the fact that the Crust Copper Company (CCC) has purchased over 10,000 square miles of land in West Fredonia for mining, the author claims that the environmental disaster which will be potentially caused by the mining can be avoided if customers simply refuse the company's products. However, the writer's logic involves several mistakes that help him idealize reverting the environmental disaster.
Customers hardly have a reason to refuse the company's products. Since the effects of environmental degradation are not immediate, customers in West Fredonia don't have efficient information to be aware of the company's detriments on their homeland. Therefore, the customers will only stick to their routine and buy any products readily available in their region, including those of CCC. For instance, if a customer wants to purchase a copper cup, they will go to CCC, for they mine copper. By the time the customers have realized the harms that mining brings to the area, the environmental destruction caused by CCC has been ingrained and thus can hardly be reversed. Therefore, the customers will not naturally turn away from CCC because the detrimental effects it may bring are not immediate to see.
Moreover, even if customers refuse to buy products from CCC, the environmental detriments are still here to stay because CCC not only provides materials for citizens in West Fredonia. CCC may be mining copper for companies and residents outside of West Fredonia in faraway places. In a world where globalization is increasingly important, the customers in West Fredonia may only be a tiny portion of CCC's target customers. Without the support of customers in West Fredonia, CCC may still thrive, dependent on other customers from around the world. Since other customers do not live in West Fredonia, they don't care about the environment in West Fredonia as well. Thus, they will still urgently need the products of CCC and help CCC to continue running.
Finally, the author ignores other factors that can reverse the detrimental environmental destruction caused by CCC. With the enhancing international environmental policies nowadays, the government can require CCC to mine in an area free of precious wild animals to minimize the effects that manufacturing has on the environment. Also, with the revolutionary technology that keeps transforming the way of production, CCC can employ techniques that help them to mine while minimizing damage to the environment. In a word, there are more practical and forceful ways of preventing environmental damage than expecting the customers in West Fredonia to reject CCC.
Thus, although the author assumes that customers' rejection of CCC will make them stop producing and stop environmental damage, such an assumption is realistic. The customers will not refuse the products of CCC in time because of delayed environmental effects, and customers from other places will still make CCC thrive. Also, more powerful ways exist to forestall the environmental damage caused by CCC.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...use the companys products. However, the writers logic involves several mistakes that he...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t immediate, customers in West Fredonia dont have efficient information to be aware ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mers do not live in West Fredonia, they dont care about the environment in West Fred...
^^^^
Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
... Thus, although the author assumes that customers rejection of CCC will make them stop pr...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33611691023 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93602861584 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459290187891 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6357251928 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264124974754 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937595500125 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859451377132 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172040603691 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980261645032 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 303, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...use the companys products. However, the writers logic involves several mistakes that he...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 158, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...t immediate, customers in West Fredonia dont have efficient information to be aware ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 606, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...mers do not live in West Fredonia, they dont care about the environment in West Fred...
^^^^
Line 9, column 40, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'customers'' or 'customer's'?
Suggestion: customers'; customer's
... Thus, although the author assumes that customers rejection of CCC will make them stop pr...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 479.0 441.139720559 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33611691023 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93602861584 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.459290187891 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.22255489022 213% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6357251928 57.8364921388 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8095238095 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.70786347227 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264124974754 0.218282227539 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0937595500125 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0859451377132 0.0701772020484 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172040603691 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0980261645032 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.