"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand our coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs."
In the give argument the author has vaguely decided that the coverage of weather and local news have decreased its viewer which is highly contentious. Different people may have different positions on this topic; however in my perspective there is more research to be done before concluding that coverage of national news only will solve the problem arised.
One reason for my belief is that the author mentions that there was complaints regarding the weather and local news. Here, the complaint might be regarding the inaccuracy of the weather in contrast to the news. Or, the local news as per the news channel is not good enough or accurate enough. For which the author assumed that complaint was for the coverage of weather and local news as whole.
Secondly, about the cancellation of the advertisements of local businesses, might be because advertising in the news is not helping them to promote their business. Or, as the local news is not presented in an appropriate way the local businesses do not want to advertise in such news show. Also, it is all assumed on the basis of past year forgetting that time changes and so does the situation and perspective of the people.
Author assuming that devoting increased time to national news, is the solution of all the problems, is just not smart decision. The author should rather research on what the complains actually are and what could be the proper fix so that the people as well as the advertisers are satisfied.
Hence, the author must carry further research regarding the issues that the news program is facing instead of jumping to a conclusion.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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flaws:
No. of Words: 274 350
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 274 350
No. of Characters: 1307 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.069 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.77 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.569 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 69 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 50 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 4.879 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.412 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.684 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ews only will solve the problem arised. One reason for my belief is that the aut...
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Line 5, column 204, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an appropriate way" with adverb for "appropriate"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... Or, as the local news is not presented in an appropriate way the local businesses do not want to adv...
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Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rogram is facing instead of jumping to a conclusion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, well, as for, in contrast, as well as, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1345.0 2260.96107784 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 274.0 441.139720559 62% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90875912409 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62279797351 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510948905109 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 413.1 705.55239521 59% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.917405055 57.8364921388 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 112.083333333 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 5.70786347227 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317130177058 0.218282227539 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.128677404194 0.0743258471296 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0576890290151 0.0701772020484 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162076552249 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.061947312339 0.0628817314937 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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