In the recommendation, the president and administrative staff of Grove College suggest that Grove College should continue its century-old tradition of all-female education and should not allow entry of men into its programs. Their assertion is based on the results of a student and alumnae survey. While the suggested recommendation might be true, three questions must be answered, which if not answered will dramatically reduce the persuasiveness of the argument.
First of all, was the survey conducted among students in a scientific manner? It might be possisble that the respondents of the survey are not an effective representation of the students in Grove College. It might be possible that the survey was limited only to students who are champions of feminism and want the all-female education to continue. Perhaps, the number of students responding to the survey is quite less as compared to the strength of Grove College. If this is true, then the 80 percent figure will be less in quantity and the results of the survey cannot be trusted. If either of these circumstances is true, the arguments of the president and the staff does not hold water.
Second of all, do the alumnae, who responded to the survey, contribute significantly towards the alumnae funding. It might be possile that the alumnae who responded to the survey and opposed the introduction of co-education, do not contribute to the funds and it is only a few of the alumnae who donate majorly towards the fund. It might also be the case that the reach of the survey was limited and only a few of Grove College's alumnae, who came acros the survey, responded to the survey. If such cases turn out to be true, the funding received from alumane is not compromised and the contention of the president and administrative staff is invalid.
Last of all, will the continuation of all-girls education in Grove College contribute towards improving the morale of the students? It might be possible that the students of Grove College face difficulty in their jobs after graduation since they do not have the experience of working and collaborating in a male-female environment. It may also be possible that many firms do not participate in job fairs at Grove College because they find Grove College graduates not well prepared for industry because of the lack of male in the college environment. If such circumstances are true, then the tradition is not beneficial for the students and thus the contention of the president and the staff is unwarranted.
While it might be true that preserving the all-female education tradition in Grove College will be beneficial, the president and the administrative staff should answer the following questions so as to bolster the credibility of their argument : whether the student survey is a true representative of the opinions of the students, whether the alumae opposing co-education contribute significantly towards the alumnae funds and whether the all-female eduaction is salutary for the students of Grove College.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 14 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2488 1500
No. of Different Words: 184 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.026 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.994 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 104 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.053 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.391 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.385 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.135 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
...three questions must be answered, which if not answered will dramatically reduce t...
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Line 3, column 55, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a scientific manner" with adverb for "scientific"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...was the survey conducted among students in a scientific manner? It might be possisble that the respond...
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Line 3, column 272, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
...the survey was limited only to students who are champions of feminism and want the all-...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
... responding to the survey is quite less as compared to the strength of Grove Colle...
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Line 9, column 193, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...f should answer the following questions so as to bolster the credibility of their argume...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.6327345309 153% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 55.5748502994 108% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2542.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 495.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13535353535 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05067971478 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.391919191919 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.0319870651 57.8364921388 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.222222222 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.61111111111 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256934061419 0.218282227539 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0920782829399 0.0743258471296 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105050090343 0.0701772020484 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181936228618 0.128457276422 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955363265167 0.0628817314937 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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