Recent incursions by deep-sea fishermen into the habitat of the Madagascan shrimp have led to a significant reduction in the species population. With the breeding season fast approaching, the number of shrimp should soon begin to increase. Nonetheless, the population should not return to the levels before the fishing boats arrived. Because this trend is expected to continue over the next several years, the Madagascan shrimp will quickly become an endangered species.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Fisherman incursions generally depend on the price of the fish or a sea animal would would yield them the more profit and less effort. Fishing a shrimp is relatively more difficult than any other fish because according to the paper by Jon Husteon, shrimps have a outer skin which can sense any form of danger around. Fishing rods or nets have been designed in such a way that it could easily hook onto the animals outer skin, but in the case of shrimps, the outer skin would help it detect the danger, thus making it diificult for the fisherman to catch them.
There was a study conducted by University of Melbourne, where they just dropped a hook, 7m from the sea level. There was an apparent shift of movement noticed when the hook reached near the shrimps. Shrimps are very proactive creatures which can easily glide though the waters at a speed of 40miles per hour at the time of danger, so tracking them and catching them again is a tedious task. This makes the fishing of shrimps nearly impossible. But ,the scientists later discovered that a substance named bleak powder, makes them insenstive of the danger, thus making it easier to trap them. This substance is now readily available, but the sources of this substance is just 0.5% of the total resources. Every year almost 10% of this resource is getting depleted, so the trend of fisherman of fish Madagascan shrimps might not reach to an extent where they are declared as the endangered species.
Furthermore, shrimps yield just a profit of $4 per fish, which is very less as compared to the rays or sharks, which are way more easier to catch, thanks to the scientists who have developed an inexpensive equipment for this purpose. So the fisherman would prefer these speices rather than shrimps. The only reason that accounts for the massive incursions is because sharks and other rays serve as a food for shrimps, which is making them more abundant in the sea water. Over the past few years, sharks are more in the demand, which leads to imbalance between the sharks and shrimps. So if fisherman could hunt the shrimps for several years, then it would ensure a proper balance between the various species inside the water.
Thus, even if the incursions by deep-sea fisherman in the habitats of Madagascan shrimps would increase, it would certainly not lead to the stage where they become endangered, rather a proper balance would be the result of fishing shrimps.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 421 350
No. of Characters: 1959 1500
No. of Different Words: 205 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.53 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.653 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.326 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.312 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.658 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.562 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.351 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 80, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: would
...n the price of the fish or a sea animal would would yield them the more profit and less eff...
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Line 1, column 262, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the paper by Jon Husteon, shrimps have a outer skin which can sense any form of ...
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Line 1, column 484, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'detects'?
Suggestion: detects
...f shrimps, the outer skin would help it detect the danger, thus making it diificult fo...
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Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ishing of shrimps nearly impossible. But ,the scientists later discovered that a s...
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Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...thermore, shrimps yield just a profit of per fish, which is very less as compared...
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Line 9, column 75, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...profit of per fish, which is very less as compared to the rays or sharks, which a...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...ed to the rays or sharks, which are way more easier to catch, thanks to the scientists who ...
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Line 9, column 190, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'inexpensive equipment'.
Suggestion: inexpensive equipment
...ks to the scientists who have developed an inexpensive equipment for this purpose. So the fisherman woul...
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Line 9, column 397, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'food'.
Suggestion: food
... because sharks and other rays serve as a food for shrimps, which is making them more ...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 28.8173652695 87% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 420.0 441.139720559 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80952380952 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52701905584 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40074983562 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 204.123752495 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497619047619 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 596.7 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.9218223125 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.25 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.25 23.324526521 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.25 5.70786347227 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.116754641535 0.218282227539 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0417291099661 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0406486117299 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0872989690483 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358866397189 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.3799401198 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.5979740519 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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