"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
At first glance, the argument seems cogent, however, after careful analysis, we can find the argument lacks some substantial proof and evidence. The author asserts that fewer sleeping hours of executives correspond to the success of their firms which powerful statistic data is absence. It's a misleading article to relate only sleeping hours to the achievement of a company.
First, the report states that executives who sleep less than 6 hours, their firms tend to be a success. This paragraph obliterate others' hard work in the company, not just managers. An organization cannot be success without cooperation between colleagues. It's not appropriate to attribute the accomplishment of a business only to executives. All employees' dedications should be counted. Furthermore, sleeping less doesn't mean working longer, the author seems to confound these two together. People can spend their personal time in different areas like exercising, hanging out or watching TVs but not sleeping. You cannot expect that less sleeping hours will lead to longer working hours.
Second, how the writer defines "success" is using "profit margin". A higher profit margin doesn't mean higher net profit. To determine a successful firm should also included business culture, employee happiness, etc. and need to take a long term examination. Profit margin may be one of the factors but not the only key point. Applying less sleeping hours lead to higher profit margin is misplanting the definition of success.
In the only presented evidence, it is not persuasive about how related sleeping less and profit margins are. There are risks to hiring less sleeping hours only for a corporation since less sleeping may cause serious health issues which make things unpredictable. Furthermore, no one can guarantee that the reason causes less sleeping hours is due to longer working hours, and what industries need is efficiency not just long working hours.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 307 350
No. of Characters: 1587 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.186 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.169 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.645 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 125 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.158 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.678 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.317 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.496 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.077 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...ich powerful statistic data is absence. Its a misleading article to relate only sle...
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Line 5, column 415, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
... be counted. Furthermore, sleeping less doesnt mean working longer, the author seems t...
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Line 9, column 51, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...w the writer defines 'success' is using 'profit margin'. A hi...
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Line 9, column 112, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...it margin'. A higher profit margin doesnt mean higher net profit. To determine a ...
^^^^^^
Line 9, column 186, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'include'
Suggestion: include
...determine a successful firm should also included business culture, employee happiness, e...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...siness culture, employee happiness, etc. and need to take a long term examination...
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Line 9, column 449, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... misplanting the definition of success. In the only presented evidence, it is no...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 28.8173652695 49% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 55.5748502994 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1665.0 2260.96107784 74% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45901639344 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91213993303 2.78398813304 105% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596721311475 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 705.55239521 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1176593753 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.25 119.503703932 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.25 23.324526521 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.95 5.70786347227 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177589934926 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564402749897 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055209627791 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114642000007 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0323630857422 0.0628817314937 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.3799401198 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.8 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.83 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.