To serve the housing need of our students, the buckinghum college...
The claim appeared in the Memo of director of backinghum college is to build the attractive dormitories to make students attract towards the college and hence to increase the enrollment. the claim is supported by the argument the is will be surly affordable with compare to the off campus housing. The argument stated here might seem believable at first glance but it does not make the argument cogent . there might be numerous confound factors which should be considered and analyse to affirm the claim.
First, the housing needs of students is presented relative to the number of students will be enrolled in future. but there is not any systematic survey and ration about the number of houses available and no of students will get admission, existing capacity. The author might present decent evidence regarding the necessity of the dormitories. is it compulsory for students to stay at college dormitories inspite of they are localites? Are all students who are to be enrolled are from out of the region ? is there one of the criteria that students must be pay and stay in the college housing? With the lack of profound analysis, supporting logics and comprehensive reasoning, the argument stands weak.A detail study and restating the various reasons of the possibility to increase the number for students in the college is highly important.
Secondly, The argument states that the students will be double in next 50 years. it is a very long period to project something. the factors on which this analysis has been done can be vary. There must be a chance that in next 50 year, many new college may be opened which are more attractive in accommodation and also provide for effective education system. in such situation, the predication made here will be flawed. this must be also on of the factor , the director should consider before making such claim. As he fail to give statistic data that can serve as testimony, there is no strong support be be gained.
Moreover, the surety about the affordability here is also flawed. to make believe in any data to be true, there must be a convincing by the proof. Here, the author should present the comparison about the price of the on-campus house rants with the off-campus house pricing. due to lack of this data. the argument is not supportive.Also to attract the student and to increase the enrollment, the education system, environment of the college, the record of the highest percentiles of the past students are considered not the ambient and luxurious look only. The argument is rife with holes and assumptions hence not strong enough to lead to increase funding.
In Conclusion, the the argument which is stated here by the author is considered flawed due to reliance on several unwarranted assumption. If the author can answer the above presented questions and more evidence perhaps with more systematic research and analysis, then it will be possible to evaluate the viability of the claim.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 497 350
No. of Characters: 2403 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.722 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.835 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.618 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 179 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.621 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.786 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.625 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The claim appeared in the Memo of direct...
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Line 1, column 201, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...e and hence to increase the enrollment. the claim is supported by the argument the ...
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Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...but it does not make the argument cogent . there might be numerous confound factor...
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Line 1, column 418, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: There
... it does not make the argument cogent . there might be numerous confound factors whic...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...dered and analyse to affirm the claim. First, the housing needs of students is ...
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Line 2, column 116, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...the number of students will be enrolled in future. but there is not any systematic survey...
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Line 2, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: But
...of students will be enrolled in future. but there is not any systematic survey and ...
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Line 2, column 217, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...bout the number of houses available and no of students will get admission, existin...
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Line 2, column 356, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...rding the necessity of the dormitories. is it compulsory for students to stay at c...
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Line 2, column 424, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to stay at college dormitories inspite of they are localites? Are all students ...
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Suggestion: Is
...e enrolled are from out of the region ? is there one of the criteria that students...
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Suggestion: A
...ive reasoning, the argument stands weak.A detail study and restating the various ...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ts in the college is highly important. Secondly, The argument states that the s...
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Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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...udents will be double in next 50 years. it is a very long period to project someth...
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Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: The
... very long period to project something. the factors on which this analysis has been...
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Line 3, column 371, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: In
...provide for effective education system. in such situation, the predication made he...
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Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: This
...e predication made here will be flawed. this must be also on of the factor , the dir...
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Line 3, column 466, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...awed. this must be also on of the factor , the director should consider before mak...
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Line 3, column 530, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'fails'.
Suggestion: fails
...onsider before making such claim. As he fail to give statistic data that can serve a...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
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...s testimony, there is no strong support be be gained. Moreover, the sur...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ere is no strong support be be gained. Moreover, the surety about the affordabi...
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Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: To
... the affordability here is also flawed. to make believe in any data to be true, th...
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Line 4, column 287, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Due
...ants with the off-campus house pricing. due to lack of this data. the argument is n...
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Line 4, column 313, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...ouse pricing. due to lack of this data. the argument is not supportive.Also to attr...
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Line 4, column 344, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
...is data. the argument is not supportive.Also to attract the student and to increase ...
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Line 4, column 344, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...is data. the argument is not supportive.Also to attract the student and to increase ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng enough to lead to increase funding. In Conclusion, the the argument which is...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...se funding. In Conclusion, the the argument which is stated here by the au...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...se funding. In Conclusion, the the argument which is stated here by the au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 39.0 19.6327345309 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2456.0 2260.96107784 109% => OK
No of words: 495.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96161616162 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73327621328 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460606060606 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 18.0 8.76447105788 205% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.847279603 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4615384615 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0384615385 23.324526521 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.92307692308 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176384053709 0.218282227539 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0532289629945 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0730626516794 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980743239271 0.128457276422 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0952092396643 0.0628817314937 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 98.500998004 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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