SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's current headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
Task: Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on the assumptions and what the implications are if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
My response:
The news report stated that SuperCorp recently moved to the city of Corporateville and that is their headquarters. SuperCorp is a homeowner industry that made the decision to be in the place in Corporateville. One must prove that SuperCorp has made the best decision of how that the company of homeowners was the highest headquarters.
Suddenly, there are number of homeowners proves that Corporateville is the superior place to live than Middlesburg. The reason that there are large downtown cities such that a number of hotels and motels for residents to stay for a certain number of days. Therefore, the government collects income and taxes in every building. However, they did not have the highest collection because their urban is not large enough. Because of that, this would dominate in terms of their population and collections according to the government.
The reason for SuperCorp is could be called as a headquarters is that the city where it moved from does not have the highest population and their economy has become poor. Recently, the studies show that Middleburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, Supercorp has determined workers prefer to live nearest that is not urban. The only thing that the town is nor urban is because the land is small and could not maintain the whole universe. According to the survey, the number of employees in SuperCorp is large to live in an un-urban area so that they would commute easily.
Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg depends on their government collecting income taxes. This is safe for employees to work; however, the minimum wages are the lowest pay such that they work temporarily, but they could be placed in temp-to-hire position. However, this seems hard that people will find difficult throughout the evidence and explanation of how Corporateville is popular than the other ones.
Consequently, the government made the decision that Corporateville was superfluously the headquarters of all-time. It is clear that the survey shows that a number of employees who tend to live that is not urban, but some that lives in an urban area is remarkably adequate.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
argument 3 -- not OK
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flaws:
it is on the wrong track for argument essays. read a good GRE book.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 395 350
No. of Characters: 1974 1500
No. of Different Words: 178 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.458 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.997 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.9 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 128 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.189 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.4 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.293 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.609 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.052 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 13, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tions prove unwarranted. My response: The news report stated that SuperCorp re...
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Line 9, column 26, Rule ID: IS_SHOULD[1]
Message: Did you mean 'it'?
Suggestion: it
...overnment. The reason for SuperCorp is could be called as a headquarters is th...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 55.5748502994 70% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2033.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 394.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15989847716 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9869171559 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46192893401 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 630.9 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.1729013255 57.8364921388 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 107.0 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.36842105263 5.70786347227 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280599354912 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0915096759484 0.0743258471296 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106468393111 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138261914818 0.128457276422 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0963881099702 0.0628817314937 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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