SuperCorp recently moved its headquarters to Corporateville. The recent surge in the number of homeowners in Corporateville proves that Corporateville is a superior place to live than Middlesburg, the home of SuperCorp's original headquarters. Moreover, Middlesburg is a predominately urban area and according to an employee survey, SuperCorp has determined that its workers prefer to live in an area that is not urban. Finally, Corporateville has lower taxes than Middlesburg, making it not only a safer place to work but also a cheaper one. Therefore, Supercorp clearly made the best decision.
According to the debate between Supercorp moving to Corporateville instead of Middlesburg seems like the right choice was made. Corporateville was a far better place to have the Supercord headquarters rather than staying in Middlesburg.
First off, what made me believe Corporateville is a better town is that the employees of Supercorp prefer to live in an area that is not urban, although Middlesburg is a predominately urban area. If this survey is proved to all be true according to the employees that is a big reason to look at where the company should be moved to Corporateville instead of staying at Middlesburg. Secondly, Corporateville has a bigger population of homeowners compared to Middlesburg. The company may see more success moving their headquarters in a larger, more useful town. Lastly, which is very important, if the employees of Supercorp move to Corporateville, they will live in a less urbanized area and more importantly, their taxes will be cheaper. This will save the company more money with how much they pay for their taxes in Corporateville and save those employees money paying for taxes as well. If Corporateville is a safer and cheaper area to live, then there is a win-win for both the company and the employees of the company.
Now if the assumptions are found out to be untrue, then this decision could take a turning point. First, the employee survey may say a lot about the company and whether they should make a move or not. Evidence should be shown of the responses from the surveys. Also, if Corporateville is a less urban area and has an overpour of homeowners in the population, how can the taxes be so much lower? Also, how can it be more safe with a bigger population of people? Do the employees want to work and live in an area that is not urban? These are all points we should be allowed to find from the survey respondents.
All of the reasons stated in the argument seem like very good points made to make a reader believe that Supercord headquarters should be moved to Corporateville instead of staying in Middlesburg. The assumptions deemed to make a final decision to move the company of Supercorp to make its move to Corporateville.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 377 350
No. of Characters: 1774 1500
No. of Different Words: 156 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.406 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.706 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.97 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 112 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.944 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.59 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.611 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.344 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.514 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 197, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dlesburg is a predominately urban area. If this survey is proved to all be true ac...
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Line 3, column 849, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'employees'' or 'employee's'?
Suggestion: employees'; employee's
... taxes in Corporateville and save those employees money paying for taxes as well. If Corp...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
...to find from the survey respondents. All of the reasons stated in the argument seem lik...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, lastly, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 55.5748502994 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1818.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 377.0 441.139720559 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82228116711 5.12650576532 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04887056678 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437665782493 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.0 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6829556839 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9444444444 23.324526521 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.77777777778 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22451773822 0.218282227539 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800359076438 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0643041733678 0.0701772020484 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165522704894 0.128457276422 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0744445455485 0.0628817314937 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.3799401198 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 98.500998004 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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