In surveys Mason City residents rank water sports (swimming, boating and fishing) among their favorite recreational activities. The Mason River flowing through the city is rarely used for these pursuits, however, and the city park department devotes little of its budget to maintaining riverside recreational facilities. For years there have been complaints from residents about the quality of the river’s water and the river’s smell. In response, the state has recently announced plans to clean up Mason River. Use of the river for water sports is therefore sure to increase. The city government should for that reason devote more money in this year’s budget to riverside recreational facilities.
As per the argument, Mason city residents enjoy water sports, like swimming, boating and fishing and claims that nearby Mason river is rarely used for these activities. As there are less recreational activities to maintained on river side, the city council alot little budget to maintain these activities. But in recent times, city resiidents have claimed about the foul smell of water, city council have allocated increased budget to clean up the river. With these activities going on, author claims that this cleaning activity will result in increased recreational activities and city council should, therefore, increase the funds allocated for recreational activities to be maintained on river side.
These claims are far fetched where author has directly linked the river side recreational activities with the present state of the river and iI think is it not advisable to link these two activities with one another without answering some questions.
First of all, we have to understand, that if the river is not rarely used for these activities, what are the activities for which Mason river is used for, is it swimming, fishing or boating. Activities like swimming can also be carried out in swimming pools. Also, there is a possibility that boating and fishing can be carried out in other nearby water sources like ponds, which is a few miles away from the town, or some other rivers. For example, there are chances that Mason town have a pond, which is 5 miles away, to which families usually enjoy their weekend doing activities like fishing, barbeque, camping etc, so they usually go out on their weekend to enjoy instead of doing activities in the town river instead. Without answering this question, it would be far feteched to assume that all the activities are done in Mason river itself.
Secondly, author assumes that town council, as they are allocating increased budget for river maintainces, they should also increase increa funds to maintain river side activies as well, this is also a inncorrect assumption which relies on the present condition of the rivers with their cleaning activities. For instance, this river mainting activy might be not be an annual activity and its limitied to once in five years.
So to use this argument to make a claim is not wise as it is not in any way related to the funds given for maitaining recreational activities.
To summarize, without answering these questions about recreationcal activities going on in Mason river, and without knowing the frequesncy for budget allocation for mainting river side, author cannot claim that recreational activities will be increased. And even though these activities are increased, do they really need extra funds to maintiain these ongoing activities.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: As there are less recreational activities to maintained on river side, the city council alot little budget to maintain these activities.
Error: alot Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: But in recent times, city resiidents have claimed about the foul smell of water, city council have allocated increased budget to clean up the river.
Error: resiidents Suggestion: residents
Sentence: These claims are far fetched where author has directly linked the river side recreational activities with the present state of the river and iI think is it not advisable to link these two activities with one another without answering some questions.
Error: iI Suggestion: me
Sentence: For example, there are chances that Mason town have a pond, which is 5 miles away, to which families usually enjoy their weekend doing activities like fishing, barbeque, camping etc, so they usually go out on their weekend to enjoy instead of doing activities in the town river instead.
Error: barbeque Suggestion: barbecue
Sentence: Without answering this question, it would be far feteched to assume that all the activities are done in Mason river itself.
Error: feteched Suggestion: fetched
Sentence: Secondly, author assumes that town council, as they are allocating increased budget for river maintainces, they should also increase increa funds to maintain river side activies as well, this is also a inncorrect assumption which relies on the present condition of the rivers with their cleaning activities.
Error: maintainces Suggestion: maintained
Error: inncorrect Suggestion: incorrect
Error: activies Suggestion: active
Error: increa Suggestion: inches
Sentence: For instance, this river mainting activy might be not be an annual activity and its limitied to once in five years.
Error: activy Suggestion: active
Error: mainting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: limitied Suggestion: limited
Sentence: So to use this argument to make a claim is not wise as it is not in any way related to the funds given for maitaining recreational activities.
Error: maitaining Suggestion: maintaining
Sentence: To summarize, without answering these questions about recreationcal activities going on in Mason river, and without knowing the frequesncy for budget allocation for mainting river side, author cannot claim that recreational activities will be increased.
Error: frequesncy Suggestion: frequency
Error: mainting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: recreationcal Suggestion: recreational
Sentence: And even though these activities are increased, do they really need extra funds to maintiain these ongoing activities.
Error: maintiain Suggestion: maintain
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argument 1 -- not OK
argument 2 -- not OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 447 350
No. of Characters: 2246 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.598 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.025 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.58 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.8 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.458 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.411 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.59 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 160, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...tate of the river and iI think is it not advisable to link these two activities w...
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Line 6, column 201, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ver side activies as well, this is also a inncorrect assumption which relies on t...
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Line 6, column 358, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nce, this river mainting activy might be not be an annual activity and its limiti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2310.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 447.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1677852349 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66437787458 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.451901565996 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.6273673949 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 154.0 119.503703932 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.8 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 5.70786347227 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.275190689889 0.218282227539 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12237337191 0.0743258471296 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109122650743 0.0701772020484 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145856821164 0.128457276422 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0932762812119 0.0628817314937 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 14.3799401198 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.3 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.25 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 12.3882235529 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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