Ten years ago, as part of a comprehensive urban renewal program, the city of Transopolis adapted for industrial use a large area of severely substandard housing near the freeway. Subsequently, several factories were constructed there, crime rates in the area declined, and property tax revenues for the entire city increased. To further revitalize the city, we should now take similar action in a declining residential area on the opposite side of the city. Since some houses and apartments in existing nearby neighborhoods are currently unoccupied, alternate housing for those displaced by this action will be readily available.
According to the suggestion from planning department of the city of Transopolis, declining residential
area in the city should be used for industrial use. To support this claim, they mentioned that 10 years ago in order to revitalize the city under urban renewal program they adapted the scheme to build industries in are of severely substandard housing which brought positive changes in the city. However, there are some flaws in the suggestion which needs to be answered.
Firstly, planning department presumes that as crime rates were decreased and property tax revenues of the entire city increased, their task was successful. However, there is no detailed information about how this was achieved. If we consider that more factories were built due to which residential population decreased which could have reduced the crime rates in that particular area but it might have aggravated in other areas of the city.
Secondly, there is no mention of side effects of the industries to the environment and residents of the country. Likewise, there is no data to prove that there is requirement of industries in other areas of the city. Planning department is not considering that cost of houses will increase as there will not be more residential area, which is burdensome for common people. Also, planning department is assuming that the residents of the area where they are planning to build factories and industries will easily get the accomodation in nearby neighbourhoods.
Adding more to the last paragraph, There is no substantial evidence that how much houses are available in the nearby areas. What is the price of those houses? Is it afforadable for everyone?.Residents also need to look for other things as well like is there any school/colleges available in the area and if yes, what is the level of the education, fees and are there any vacant seats.It is not easy to migrate to another area considering all the aspects regarding education, healthcare, jobs.
Finally, considering all the points planning department's suggestion needs to be little pragmatic and to support their stand they need to provide some concrete and substantial evidence. As of now, this argument seems weak taking all the flaws in consideration.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 365 350
No. of Characters: 1830 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.371 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.014 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.778 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 100 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 80 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.674 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.608 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ty of Transopolis, declining residential area in the city should be used for indu...
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Line 8, column 78, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...ere is no substantial evidence that how much houses are available in the nearby area...
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Line 8, column 192, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Residents
...houses? Is it afforadable for everyone?.Residents also need to look for other things as w...
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Line 8, column 245, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as well 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...o need to look for other things as well like is there any school/colleges available ...
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Line 8, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...on, fees and are there any vacant seats.It is not easy to migrate to another area ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, likewise, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1883.0 2260.96107784 83% => OK
No of words: 362.0 441.139720559 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20165745856 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9808985104 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486187845304 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 705.55239521 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.807129785 57.8364921388 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.533333333 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1333333333 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255345612554 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075046139606 0.0743258471296 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0703552896461 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.11728486136 0.128457276422 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0967465104165 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.3799401198 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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