The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
It is mentioned by the vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries in a recommendation that by using surveillance techniques using electronic equipment, the organization can help improve the level of productivity generated by employees. However, while the conclusion made by the vice president may hold water, it is based upon three baseless assumptions, which if not proven, would significantly weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
Firstly, the author of the recommendation does not provide any proof of how they concluded that employees were spending time using the internet for shopping or entertainment purposes. It is possible that only a handful of them were using the internet for their personal reasons during their work hours, and that the majority of the employees are in fact diligently working on their assigned tasks. It is also possible that the handful of the employees using the internet for their personal activities were only doing it on one or two occasions, and that they are otherwise quite morally sound individuals who would not spend the organization’s resources for their own personal gain. If these reasons prove to be true then the author’s claim that the usage of the internet for personal reasons is correlated to a decrease in employee productivity will be weakened.
Secondly, the author does not provide any proof on how the company’s overall profit margins are being affected by the performance of the employees. There may be several other factors in play here. Perhaps the industry involved in selling or marketing the particular product or service is going through an unprecedented crisis period due to a rise in a rival company’s stature in the market. It is also likely that the product or service produced by Climpson Industries is a victim of the current market scenario where it is getting obsolete, such as electronic pagers or fax machines at one point of time. If either of those reasons turn out to be true, then the author’s contention that overall profits of the company will be improved by employing surveillance techniques is significantly hampered.
In conclusion, the argument as it stands is incredibly flawed due to its foundation on several unfounded assumptions. Further evidence is required which would support the author’s claims made in the recommendation, which would be beneficial in fully evaluating the validity of the argument.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1994 1500
No. of Different Words: 193 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.152 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.978 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 128 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 95 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.133 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.769 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.366 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.601 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 375, Rule ID: IF_IS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'is'?
Suggestion: is
... upon three baseless assumptions, which if not proven, would significantly weaken ...
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Line 7, column 119, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
...ation on several unfounded assumptions. Further evidence is required which would suppor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2046.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28682170543 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09232915174 2.78398813304 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511627906977 0.468620217663 109% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.2965520716 57.8364921388 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.384615385 119.503703932 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7692307692 23.324526521 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 5.70786347227 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256163145903 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822812558168 0.0743258471296 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0849784872074 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136314361636 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0979659233542 0.0628817314937 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.4 14.3799401198 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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