Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
Based on the facts that Workers in Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in Masonton and that relative to population size stress-related illness is proportionally much less reported in Leeville than in Masonton, the Leeville Chamber of Commerce concludes that the people living in the smaller city of Leeville live a relatively relaxed pace of life and benefit from it. The argument is well presented but not well reasoned, rife with holes and assumptions, not strong enough to lead to the cloclusion the author want. Following problems serve to undermine the argument.
First and foremost, the author of the argument presents evidence that workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton to support the conclusion. However, the author is falling to consider other possible alternatives to the fewer sick days. It is possible that workers in Leeville is facing so harsh employment conditions that they could not be free to take sick days when they want, which is much more unhealthy compared with their counterparts in the large city of Masoton. To strengthen the argument, the author would benefit from implementing a normed survey asking the workers in the two cities the detailed situation about whether they can take sick days as they want.
The author reasonably assumes that fact that there are less records of stress-related illness in Leeville than in Masonton relative to population size, and suggests that the fact results from much less stressful jobs in the smaller city, which in consequence leads to much relaxed pace of life. But the author do not take in consideration that the opposite may be true as well. Actually, the smaller city could have much higher amount of stressed jobs, meanwhile the worker here are less vulnerable to the stressed working environment, or the most of their wages are not high enough to afford these workers to go to hospitals and check stress-related illness. Unless the connection between the lower diagnosis of stress-related illness and the relaxed pace of life is representative, valid and reliable, it could not be used to effectively back the argument.
In a nut shell, although at first the argument proposed by the author seems convincing and cogent, there are several gaps in the reasoning. In consideration of the facts given, some alternative possibilities are plausible as well. The author fails to adequately support the interference presented in the argument.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 56, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun records is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...onably assumes that fact that there are less records of stress-related illness in Le...
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Line 5, column 266, Rule ID: TO_TOO[2]
Message: Did you mean 'too'?
Suggestion: too
...maller city, which in consequence leads to much relaxed pace of life. But the auth...
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Line 7, column 165, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'facts'' or 'fact's'?
Suggestion: facts'; fact's
... the reasoning. In consideration of the facts given, some alternative possibilities a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, may, so, then, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13300492611 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.845815835 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.465517241379 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.0387008219 57.8364921388 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.857142857 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 23.324526521 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.70786347227 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467102681235 0.218282227539 214% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137544748333 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171893425461 0.0701772020484 245% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271579373436 0.128457276422 211% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.167788037249 0.0628817314937 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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