"Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar
with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become
obsolete."
computer and televisions are the gifts of the technology. Once considered luxurious items and remotely affordable, these are common items found in everyone's homes. it is rightly said that people get familiar with many great places they have not visited before. However, the tourism will not become obsolete. I would say that if pizza is my favorite food that does not necessarily mean that I will not visit Italy at all.
computer and television are the sources of entertainment as well as knowledge that necessarily will give all the experiences. tourism provides pleasant feel of weather, soothing experience to our eyes through its scenic beauty. it helps in relieving from all tensions and problems in the life. besides if there is change in your diet, it helps in appeasing the mind from the typical or boring lifestyle. mind gets very well refreshed from any kind of tourism. besides it provides knowledge about the place newly sometimes. The mood is again refreshed, and it will again give a fresh start to the daily chores.
besides just sitting at home and watching television might provide knowledge but will have the dearth of the pleasant experience or the change required in mundane routine. The computer and television may give the information about the places that are not visited before. computer or television does not provide the refreshment that is required not only by the body but also by the mind. I would like to add although I love to watch the tennis match means that I will not love to play the match. there is different pleasure and satisfaction of playing a match rather than only watching it. Similarly, visiting a tourist spot and experience gives immense pleasure rather than only watching it on a television or computer.
Finally, to sum up I would say that it is necessary to feel the experience rather than just watching it only. Hence tourism will not obsolete henceforth.
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| 2023-08-12 | Kshitij Kasabekar | 50 | view |
| 2020-09-10 | Shreyan36 | 66 | view |
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...ence rather than just watching it only. Hence tourism will not obsolete henceforth.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, hence, however, if, may, similarly, so, well, kind of, as well as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 322.0 442.535393258 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99068322981 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.55969084622 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65321557213 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 215.323595506 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515527950311 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.2119768679 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.35 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1 23.4991977007 69% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.21951772744 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236008620632 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752511754583 0.0831039109588 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0853310653326 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144111678106 0.150359130593 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0964133925982 0.0667264976115 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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