It is a common misconception among general population that one can only climb the ladder of success through competing with other people. And the prompt rightly suggests that in order to prepare young people for the real world, teaching them cooperation is more effective than competition. In my opinion, I mostly agree with this suggestion for two major reasons. But I do concede that some form of healthy competition is also necessary to prepare a young generation for the real world.
To begin, familiarizing the concept of cooperation to students or young generation from the beginning helps them understand the importance of working in a team. Human by nature is a dependent being. Societies and states are formed from this notion of cooperation. Without a team or alliance, no people can survive alone in this world. For instance, no job or work can be done independently. Laborers building an establishment needs a team to complete their task, Scientists conducting a research needs help form their contemporaries to bring in new ideas or help them understand existing ideas, no government can survive and develop his/her nation without forming an alliance. These examples demonstrate that in every aspect of the world, success is achieved through cooperation not through competition.
Moreover, instilling competition among younger people rather than cooperation will bring havoc rather than success. Excessive competition brings out the toxicity in any person. People start to conspire against one another, try to put down one another to gain advantage when they believe in competition more than cooperation. For example, when employees in a company starts to compete against one another to get up in the ladder of success, they will belittle one another, conspire , doublecross and even betray one another. So, sense of competition brings out the worse in any situation.
However, I do concede that some level of healthy competition among peers help them grow and develop their skills. For example, two students when competes with each other, will better understand their lackings and can work towards this lacking and become more skills. Absence of any sense of competition might make people more complacent and lathergic. Some might feel that even if I cannot complete a task, my teammate will and thus putting the burden of his task on his colleague.
In conclusion, instilling cooperation in people from a younger phase will help people understand the importance of team building and working together. They will be free from any toxicity that compeition brings out in people. But, healthy competition among peers is also necessary for personal growth.
- The table below shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and year after It was refurbished The charts showed a result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two periods 67
- Inspite of the advances made in agriculture many people around the world still go hungry Why is this the case What can be done about this problem 61
- The bar chart below describes the gross domestic spending on Research and Development in five countries between 2001 and 2011 61
- Laws should be flexible enough to take account of various circumstances times and places Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing 50
- Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world Do you think this is a positive or negative development 56
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 486, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...plete their task, Scientists conducting a research needs help form their contemporaries to...
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Line 3, column 508, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
...ntists conducting a research needs help form their contemporaries to bring in new id...
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Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...they will belittle one another, conspire , doublecross and even betray one another...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 32.0 12.9106741573 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2252.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 426.0 442.535393258 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28638497653 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85399873074 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 686.7 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.0355101039 60.3974514979 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9130434783 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5217391304 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175743505089 0.243740707755 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0551767780458 0.0831039109588 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0413633891496 0.0758088955206 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1065540394 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.041033658719 0.0667264976115 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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