"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Society plays a major role in the development of fledging individuals in a nation. People living in a particual society is dependant on how the society shapes them. The mentality of people plays a major role which constitutes a society. The author says that the best way for a society for the preparation of its youth for leadership in a particular field, for instance, in a working of a government, industries etc. is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. I do not completely agree with what the author stated. Hence, I am against the notion.
In this competitive world, it becomes difficult for an individual to outstand within a crowd. Though, it becomes important for a person to participate in a competition as the person develops a sense of responsibility and it pushes their limits to perform the best. It depends on how you think about it. Some may consider competition as onnerous, stressful and non cooperative while some may have an optimistic approach towards it and engenders a sense of outshining other competetors.
Taking into consideration of what the author said, instilling a sense of cooperation in an individual is important because a leader is someone who leads the crowd. Leadership quality is itself a huge responsibilty in itself. It includes decision-making, respresenting your team in a company, delivering a cogent speech in front of the people in a government body. For example, the Prime Minister Of India, Narendra Modi, is a great leader. His political party supports him through thick and thins. Therefore, his party bolsters him in any situation and makes him more confident. On the other side of the grass, if there is no opposition party, there is no ruling party. A sense of competition is must. It makes you learn more things and provides you with an experience.
Lastly, in my belief, there must be a balance between cooperation and a healthy competition.Cooperating with each other makes human connection more strong while healthy competition takes out all your hardwork.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 49, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...plays a major role in the development of fledging individuals in a nation. People...
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Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: DEPENDENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'dependent' on?
Suggestion: dependent
...People living in a particual society is dependant on how the society shapes them. The men...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Cooperating
...n cooperation and a healthy competition.Cooperating with each other makes human connection ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, lastly, may, so, still, therefore, while, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.4196629213 32% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 2235.4752809 77% => OK
No of words: 338.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09467455621 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23895185906 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556213017751 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.789703868 60.3974514979 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0 118.986275619 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0952380952 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.71428571429 5.21951772744 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283847262863 0.243740707755 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071020252603 0.0831039109588 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078256762608 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148607356135 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114582364491 0.0667264976115 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.1392134831 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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