The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Nowadays, the society always want to nurish more young blood as a leader for different realm, such as government, industry, nature science and so on. In my piont if view, I partly disagree with such conclusion. For me, I think competetion is a more important way for young people to establish there leader ship. Also, I am not trying to fully refuse cooperation, it might be a subsidinary way for the young people to enhence their leadership.
To begin with, when talking about government, maybe some advocators will say only if the young people cooperate with each other, they can reach a more effective way to be a leader. However, it might be too cursory to reach such a conclusion. From the past, thousand and millions years, leaders always fight their way toward the top, cooperation may looks less violent, but it does not work all the time. For example, in the mest turtoil years, how can we raise a young man by teach him how to cooperate if other countries just want a ivasion through their homeland?
What's more, some may also assert that in the realm of industry, cooperation means everything since no one can build a rocket or a spaceship by his or her own. Nevertheless, indusriess do need cooperation but the major rocket engineering manager is only the job for one or two most intelligence and meticulous people. Which means, for the whole program we need cooperation, to put everything together, but for the latest techonology and the blueprint of it, only a few people can afford it. That is to say, we need competetion, to win the best design. That is the way we achieve the most interests, cooperation maybe just a waste of time. For example, Steve Jobs, who manage to survive through the pressure of all those more powerful companys, design his own Macs, iPhones that no one can surpass him even today. He became a leader not by cooperating, but by showing how strong he can be to competite with others.
In sum, I concede in sime fileds, to reach the final goal, we need to teach the young people the spirit of cooperation. While for the starting progress, young people have to fight their way toward to leadership, to let the world know he or she is better than the others to be a leader, and lead the others to success. Just asserting that cooperation is the only thing to instill to young people is an unwise conclusion which need further discussion.
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 50
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: a thousand
...reach such a conclusion. From the past, thousand and millions years, leaders always figh...
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Suggestion: an
... cooperate if other countries just want a ivasion through their homeland? What...
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Suggestion: What's
...nt a ivasion through their homeland? Whats more, some may also assert that in the ...
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Suggestion:
...er own. Nevertheless, indusriess do need cooperation but the major rocket enginee...
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Suggestion:
.... For example, Steve Jobs, who manage to survive through the pressure of all thos...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, still, while, for example, i think, such as, talking about, to begin with, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1963.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 421.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66270783848 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65143149542 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527315914489 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 704.065955056 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 6.24550561798 192% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.8717582369 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.055555556 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.3888888889 23.4991977007 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.27777777778 5.21951772744 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244337986031 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792074944324 0.0831039109588 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0657715955568 0.0758088955206 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166863183036 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622622577065 0.0667264976115 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 48.8420337079 133% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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