The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The point that leadership requires a sense of cooperation rather than competition is a contentious one. As per the saying 'Leaders are born ,not made', it is quite obvious that leaders do have a sense of cooperation instilled in them and the competition adds to their talent. But before jumping to any conclusions whether for young people to become good leaders require more of cooperation or competition let us look at both the aspects in detail.
Today's world is a modern world. The competition is at its peak irrespective of the field one is in. The young generation is caught in the cobwebs of competing against one another in order to gain an upper hand in the society. This is truely an unavoidable situation. Strss and strain, hurry and worry are the hallmarks of life now, and in such situations if you are not competitive enough what can you do just by cooperation.
By the above mentioned I am not stating that cooperation does not play a role in forming of leaders in the society, but solely cooperation and no sense of competition can never help in all round development of an individual.In politics, one can never win an election without competitng enthusiastically with others vying. Suppose a person works in IT industry, and he has worked much harder than his colleague of same batch, but his colleague gets promoted first. Now there are two options , either he can be more cooperative and say its all right he can get promotion next time or he can be more competitive and talk to HR's regarding this matter and fight for a better result. A manager needs to be cooperative with its team but at the same time if he is not competitive enough with other manager his team will nevwe progress.
Let us see some more examples supporting why competition dominates over cooperation. Suppose a twin is born in a family, and both of them feel hungry at the same time, then one of the child cries for food and parents give that child food .Now the second child can either cooperate with the parents and stay hungry or cry and compete for food too. This is a simple example which prooves that competition is something which one developes right from childhood. A society wants a leader to be competitive at the same time having sense of cooperation instilled in them.Thus to conclude to be a leader in any society competition is a must and cooperation should go hand in hand wherever necessary.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, regarding, second, so, still, then, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1987.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70853080569 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80560380012 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514218009479 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 632.7 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 23.0359550562 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 77.1654067572 60.3974514979 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.1875 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.375 23.4991977007 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.21951772744 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 7.80617977528 102% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153119112327 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475664445347 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.033984275978 0.0758088955206 45% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0955513409551 0.150359130593 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0319698852882 0.0667264976115 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.8420337079 110% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.2143820225 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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