The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition
The world is moving ahead in leaps and bounds in terms of technological advancements, medical studies, etc. This has given rise to a tremendous amount of competition in all the fields. Everyone wants to contribute their path in making a world a better place. The only way possible to contribute and match up with the pace with which our world is progressing is to be able to stand out in a unique way and to do so one must be ready for any problem thrown in there and up for any form of competition. I agree with the issue at hand that young people must be trained and instilled with a sense of cooperation rather than competition.
Firstly, the government is such a body that can never work as an individual or cannot be run by an individual person or a small group of people. The government body has been set up to serve the country and to do so the people working in the government or the people who hold high ranks in the government need to have a sense of cooperation rather than a sense of competition. History has proven this time and again that whenever people in the government move in the direction top achieve personal goals rather than the overall development of the country where everyone can benefit the government has collapsed and the country in turn had to suffer the consequences. For example, the government body can be compared to a cricket team if the players cooperate with one another to support one another rather than trying to single-handedly win, the team has lost. This is is exactly how the government body should work. Therefore if from a really young age people are taught more about cooperation rather than competition it will be beneficial.
Moving on, in an industry, a people holding higher ranks are known for competing with another so that they can move up the ladder in the company and leave others behind. The one thing which is overlooked is that if everyone performs their part and supports one another then not only will the company grow but also their position in the company. For example, a very popular experiment was conducted in which the employees of a company where called to a room, and a balloon with the name of each and every employee was dropped in the room. The task for the people was to find the balloon with their name on it and the first person to do so would receive some incentive. Shocking two hours past by and the people were not able to find the balloon with their name on it because of the chaos in the room. Then the coordinator asked everyone to stop and pick up the balloon right next to them and find the person whos name was on the balloon. This way within a matter of fifteen minutes everyone had the ballon with their respective names. This shows us that the more we work together the faster we can complete our tasks and the better we get at our job.
On the contrary, many people might think that healthy competition is necessary for people to stay active and stay invested in a job which is true to some extent. The flaw in this remains that it takes very little time for healthy competition to turn into a negative thing where two people are competing not only to come out as the bigger person but to denigrade the other person and push them down. Rather than this if from a very young age people are taught about cooperation and working with one another would solve this problem.
In conclusion, the trait of cooperation will go a long way rather than competition, and instilling this in the minds of the younger generation will teach them a lot. The basic concepts such as in a company one must work with their contemporaries rather than against them prove that working along with people is more beneficial in the long run rather than competing with one another
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a unique way" with adverb for "unique"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... progressing is to be able to stand out in a unique way and to do so one must be ready for any ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpetition. Firstly, the government is such a body that can never work as an in...
^^
Line 3, column 867, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...e-handedly win, the team has lost. This is is exactly how the government body should ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 918, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ly how the government body should work. Therefore if from a really young age people are ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 954, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rk. Therefore if from a really young age people are taught more about cooperation...
^^
Line 5, column 908, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
... right next to them and find the person whos name was on the balloon. This way withi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ich is true to some extent. The flaw in this remains that it takes very little time ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 58.6224719101 174% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3075.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 678.0 442.535393258 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53539823009 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10278680062 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51233112399 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407079646018 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2057537656 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.125 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220628093762 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067516417634 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513451851566 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137503349449 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455170369284 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 386, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a unique way" with adverb for "unique"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... progressing is to be able to stand out in a unique way and to do so one must be ready for any ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 27, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mpetition. Firstly, the government is such a body that can never work as an in...
^^
Line 3, column 867, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: is
...e-handedly win, the team has lost. This is is exactly how the government body should ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 918, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ly how the government body should work. Therefore if from a really young age people are ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 954, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rk. Therefore if from a really young age people are taught more about cooperation...
^^
Line 5, column 908, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: who's
... right next to them and find the person whos name was on the balloon. This way withi...
^^^^
Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ich is true to some extent. The flaw in this remains that it takes very little time ...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, really, so, still, then, therefore, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 14.8657303371 175% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 102.0 58.6224719101 174% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3075.0 2235.4752809 138% => OK
No of words: 678.0 442.535393258 153% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53539823009 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.10278680062 4.55969084622 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51233112399 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 215.323595506 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.407079646018 0.4932671777 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 704.065955056 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.99550561798 260% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.2057537656 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.125 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.25 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220628093762 0.243740707755 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.067516417634 0.0831039109588 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0513451851566 0.0758088955206 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137503349449 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455170369284 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 48.8420337079 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 12.1743820225 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.38706741573 84% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.