"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The youth of a nation is the next face of the nation. It is the young generation who is going to run the society. They need to be moulded in a way that the society is they continue to build will be in its best state. The claim discusses how instilling a sense of cooperation is more important than instilling competitive nature within the younger generation. But as much as the youth needs cooperation, competition is what would take them higher.
Competition would give a boost to the younger generation to fly high. Cooperation is always necessary to make things progress. But it is competition that makes people explore and know their capacity and limits. It helps them push themselves to the maximum to come up with newer ideas for the development for the society. Without this competition within the youth, there would be nothing to galvanize them to achieve higher. Sometimes it is only the success of others that pushes us to achieve a goal. These success stories instill a fire to run to the finish line. The absence of such competitiveness would take a person nowhere in life.
Teaching a healthy competitive spirit helps the younger generations in preparing for their future. We cannot always expect everyone to be with a cooperative nature. When a person who does not have a good competitive spirit encounters someone with non cooperative nature, they will be nonplussed. Younger generation needs to be moulded in such a way that they could face versatile situations they encounter. They need to be tested from time to time and pushed to face their fears.
That being said, we must also agree that cooperation is also as necessary as competition. A person who handles a role in the government cannot always be competitive. A person who does not learn to be cooperative with their team would be of no use within the team. So it could be concluded that competition is as necessary as cooperation and the youth should be malleable to any situation they encounter.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, as for
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 340.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83235294118 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29407602571 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83267361205 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476470588235 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 521.1 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.3372704277 60.3974514979 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.6818181818 118.986275619 63% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4545454545 23.4991977007 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.45454545455 5.21951772744 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156525528038 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486349257701 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0363314311213 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105129799677 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435794712876 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 48.8420337079 132% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.1743820225 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.38706741573 87% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.