Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to "follow your dreams," more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people's dreams are inherently selfish.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim AND the reason on which that claim is based.
Young people are the future of the nation. The goals achieved by the present youth will contribute towards the achievements of the nation in the future. The youth is often advised to follow their dreams to help them discover their hidden talents that can only be found if they explore various activities of their interest and follow their passion. However, our dreams tend to be selfish since it's the desire that we want to fulfill that we dream.
Young people are an unstoppable force that can be fruitful to the nation's growth if they focus on worthy goals and complete them. It is often seen that the youth tends to be reckless and immature about their dreams, they are more inclined to dream about luxuries instead of thinking about how they can be a resource to society and contribute to the development around them.
For instance, a student who is excellent in science tries out new experiments, wins science olympiads, and has the curiosity to know the reason behind anything and everything happening in science dreams about being a DJ in his life. This dream is only due to the lights, parties, and glamour that attract the student to become a DJ. Emphasizing picking worthy goals in such a situation can lead to a future scientist who will contribute to research, space missions, or discovering some new to the world.
Another such scenario is when the young people are interested in fighting. The wrestling and fighting show broadcasts have a huge influence on the youth practicing the moves shown in the shows. This also imbibes a fighting spirit in the youth. Instead of trying to shun the youth by asking them to follow their dreams which keep on constantly varying every other day, motivating them to pick worthy goals like joining the army to fight with the enemy can prove to be a gem. The future generations to come will feel safe and secure in their nation.
I agree with the claim and the reason based on the above instances. Dreams in young people at the start of their lives are immature and selfish, and changing daily. In such cases depending on them proves not so good.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...er, our dreams tend to be selfish since its the desire that we want to fulfill that...
^^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...pable force that can be fruitful to the nations growth if they focus on worthy goals an...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding development'?
Suggestion: the surrounding development
...a resource to society and contribute to the development around them. For instance, a student who is exce...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73841961853 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42029349645 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525885558583 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1662765441 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.294117647 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35294117647 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229534676773 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733899965434 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543723268767 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133597802808 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278355128571 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 394, Rule ID: IT_IS[17]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...er, our dreams tend to be selfish since its the desire that we want to fulfill that...
^^^
Line 3, column 67, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...pable force that can be fruitful to the nations growth if they focus on worthy goals an...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 346, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding development'?
Suggestion: the surrounding development
...a resource to society and contribute to the development around them. For instance, a student who is exce...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 2235.4752809 78% => OK
No of words: 367.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73841961853 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42029349645 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525885558583 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 518.4 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.1662765441 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.294117647 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5882352941 23.4991977007 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.35294117647 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229534676773 0.243740707755 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733899965434 0.0831039109588 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543723268767 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133597802808 0.150359130593 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278355128571 0.0667264976115 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 48.8420337079 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 12.1639044944 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.